Because you left

Because you left

A Poem by black.butterfly
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Because you left


Because you left the house on that day

The flowers in our garden aren’t growing

I put on a a fake smile in every way

Although weariness started showing

 

Ever since you left me behind like this

The blood in my veins stopped flowing

The pieces of my heart ache and miss

For its last piece is still lost and missing

 

I sent letters in hope of finding you

For you left the door open before leaving

Even if it’s a long time it will pass me through

Because you left me hurt yet worrying.

 

© 2010 black.butterfly


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I know this feeling all too well.
Sad but there's some comfort in knowing others have gone through this same thing too.

Thanks for this poetess.
Really enjoyed!

Antonio


Posted 14 Years Ago


Simply wonderful. Nothing more I can say. This was a fantastic piece.

-Richard

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like this...very good.
Great Job

Posted 14 Years Ago


Ohhh...hitting the heart a bit too close. Excellent.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Dear Writer,

This is a honestly well written poem. The bold title acts for repetition and re-emphasizes your point. A good rhyming sequence and flow to it. It has a lot of truth in the sincerity derived from the message. You are a talented writer, but there will always be room for improvement. Learn to use grammatical things like periods, commas, semi-colons, colons, quotations, et cetera.

It's a well written poem, good message, good flow, truth is mild, and so goes on down the list. Well done! 9.5/10.

A Friend and a Writer,
S. W. Scaggs

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is amazing. It portrays emotions well known to many.

-Kayla

Posted 14 Years Ago


It is so hard to beleft wondering

Posted 14 Years Ago


very nice

Posted 14 Years Ago


this was really emotional. i thought this was very well written piece! short and sweet too! well done and keep it up!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Such a powerful read here and sad.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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