YOUR IM-PERFECTIONS

WHAT MARK SAYS/THINKS ABOUT ME. I TURNED HIS WORDS INTO POETRY :)

Pictures deleated because of your smile,
you hate how your front teeth seem to stick out.
I wish you smiled more then once in awhile,
It makes you you, and its cute without a doubt.

 

You hate your strech marks oh so much,
its so very unatractive you say.
You stress and wish they'd go away,
To me your skin is perfect with every touch.

 

You say your putting on a little weight,
Although you cant put your chocolate down.
To me your bodys perfect with nothing to hate,
I think your just being a clown.

 

You seem to find so much to pick on, so many folts and flaws,
You should give yourself a break your beautiful, I still can't belive im yours.
You look at all the bad forgeting all the good,
If only you saw yourself the way I do, oh I wish you could.

 

Because you call all these things imperfections without a secound thought,
but to me you couldnt be any more perfect, your priceless you cant be brought.

 

Reviews

[mark]

awww babe this is great...thats right ur perfect to me no matter how much u hate things bout urself...those things dont matter...it doesnt make me love u anymore or any less :) well done for putting my words into a poem lol you can do anything with ur writing ur amazing :) i love the write babe well done :) i love you and ill see you tonight xxxooo

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im glad you liked it :) Hehe thank you i love you so much :)
Ill see you tonight :)

[mark]

hehe :) ur welcome i love you more xxxooo

[mark]

hehe :) ur welcome i love you

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

awwww thanks hun i got it the first time thought :"P

[C. Rose]

“deleated” should be “deleted”
“more then once” should be “more than once”
“its cute” should be “it's cute”
“its so very” should be “it's so very”
“unatractive” should be “unattractive”
“your putting on” should be “you're putting on”
“cant” should be “can't”
“bodys” should be “body's”
“your just being” should be “you're just being”
“folts” should be “faults”
“forgeting” should be “forgetting”
“im yours” should be “I'm yours”
“couldnt” should be “couldn't”
“your priceless” should be “you're priceless”
“cant” should be “can't”

Great message.
Great last line.
Keep it up :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I saw a huge review and I was like oh cool... and then i saw just how much of it was you correcting my spelling. I know its bad but, I would like more feedback less fixing errors please.

[C. Rose]

I am the moderator of the "Promote Me!" contest you entered. Pieces with technical issues are automatically disqualified. If you fix your technical issues, then I don't have to automatically disqualify this piece. Proper grammar isn't everything, but it is important to take the time to polish your piece.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I agree it is important. Although I think that you think, that the grammar, is more important then the actual poem. You didn't say very much about my piece, but made sure you corrected every bit of my spelling errors. Its fine if that's how you are, its just silly though. My piece is understandable right? that's all that matters really. If i decide to get it published then Id have to really worry about the spelling, but im not right now so.

[C. Rose]

Please explain to me why you refuse to edit.
Spelling errors distract the reader (especially folts).
Your piece will be stronger if you edit.
I missed one. "belive" should be "believe"

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im not refusing. I will do it when I get time.
All im saying is the poem should be allot more important then the spelling.

[cycy]

wow cimmy, this is so sweet and romantic how Mark thinks u are simply perfect the way you are,what you guys have is beautiful..keep growing strong.
a few pointers though
*faults instead of folts
*bought instead of brought,
altogether its a beautiful piece love :)

[cycy]

ps-this made me think of just the way you are by Bruno Mars, thats the vibe i get from these words :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

aww thanks for the beautiful review hun :) So glad you enjoyed :)
We are lucky to have eachother :)

[Eric Pudalov]

This is a really beautiful poem, Cimmy! I can definitely tell that it's from the bottom of your heart, and very honest. And I can see from the comment below that Mark appreciates it too!

Now, I know on the last poem of yours that I read I went into spellcheck mode, but if that really upsets you, I won't do it. But when I do give advice on someone's poem, it's purely out of wanting to help - part of the reason that I write the way I do is that I've had so many people help (and critique) me along the way!

And again, if you look past the spelling, etc., the message of your poem is extremely touching and sweet, which is what ultimately counts! Thank you for sharing it; I enjoyed reading it.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you so much I actually enjoy your reviews quite allot.
He does :)
Its not that I don't like it i know your just trying to help and i appreciate it i do.
Its just on that first review allot of it was more on the spelling then the poem.
I really enjoyed reading this review thanks again :)

[Eric Pudalov]

You're welcome.

[Cassie]

This is the best best bestest. I loved enjoyed, no wonder it has 4 libraries. This touched my soul and heart. This is really good stuff.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Wow that means so much really thank you :)
Im so glad its loved that much :))

[Frieda P]

Very sweet read, reminds me of Pink's Perfect! Priceless indeed...'change the voices in your head'...

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I love that song :) I got inspired to write this from another song though...
Thank you so much for your review :)

[Frieda P]

Ahh music is so inspirational. My pleasure. :-)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I know tell me about it :)

[Frieda P]

I just did ha ;-P

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

haha :P smartass :P

[Frieda P]

Haha now you sound like my kids! ;-P

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

haha :P i do?

[Frieda P]

Yes indeed, they always tell me they're supposed to be the unruly ones, not their mom! ha, I love it when they get all riled up. ;-)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

haha :P funny

[Frieda P]

They don't think so...ha, I'll tell them you said that. ;-P

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

haha you do that :P

[Blue]

I hate you, two!!! Haha. You're making me jealous all over with your enviable public display of love! Ugh!!! I want a boyfriend now. :P

Well done, Cimmy. Mark's really sweet.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Bullshit you could never hate me :P You love me :)
Awwww hun youll get one, I hope he treats you like a princess to coz you deserve that :)
Thank you for your beautiful review :)

[Blue]

*Chuckling* In the meantime, I shall content myself watching the love affairs of others. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awww there just a bit slow hun.... Mark took forever to find me :P

[Pax]

sweet and tender, love always finds ways making imperfect, perfect. beautiful piece!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you so much for your wonderful reviews :)

[Penny]

You wrote it with mark's point of view. Then you used long sentences and weaved them into a unique rhyming and still managed to keep the poem look simple and elegant. Great work. Its just adorable the way you and mark here. I'm still searching for a similar person in my life. Take care both of you, keep loving each other and keep writing lovely poems. ♥♥

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awwww thank you hun means allot to me that you think its that good :)
Keep living your life and having fun don't worries about a guy for now....
Your an amazing girl and the right guy will come along soon enough, mark took hes time to find me.
But he will find you give it time :)
Thanks again for your review :)

[Penny]

My pleasure. And yes I'm not actually worrying, why would i if have wonderful friends like you who collectively love me more than any guy ever could

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

A guy will love you more then anyone one day and treat you like a princess the way you deserve to be treated :)
One day a guy will see in you what your family and friends do :)
We think your just wonderful, not to mention talented :)

[Penny]

Awww.... that is so nice of you. I am on cloud nine now. Tenkew..

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

haha your welcome :)

[TL Boehm]

excellent poem - if only we listened to voices other than the one inside.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yes this is true sadly we don't. Thank you for your review :))