YOUR IM-PERFECTIONS

YOUR IM-PERFECTIONS

A Poem by cimmy wuv xxxooo
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WHAT MARK SAYS/THINKS ABOUT ME. I TURNED HIS WORDS INTO POETRY :)

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Pictures deleated because of your smile,
you hate how your front teeth seem to stick out.
I wish you smiled more then once in awhile,
It makes you you, and its cute without a doubt.

 

You hate your strech marks oh so much,
its so very unatractive you say.
You stress and wish they'd go away,
To me your skin is perfect with every touch.

 

You say your putting on a little weight,
Although you cant put your chocolate down.
To me your bodys perfect with nothing to hate,
I think your just being a clown.

 

You seem to find so much to pick on, so many folts and flaws,
You should give yourself a break your beautiful, I still can't belive im yours.
You look at all the bad forgeting all the good,
If only you saw yourself the way I do, oh I wish you could.

 

Because you call all these things imperfections without a secound thought,
but to me you couldnt be any more perfect, your priceless you cant be brought.

 

© 2014 cimmy wuv xxxooo


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awww babe this is great...thats right ur perfect to me no matter how much u hate things bout urself...those things dont matter...it doesnt make me love u anymore or any less :) well done for putting my words into a poem lol you can do anything with ur writing ur amazing :) i love the write babe well done :) i love you and ill see you tonight xxxooo

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

mark

6 Years Ago

hehe :) ur welcome i love you more xxxooo
mark

6 Years Ago

hehe :) ur welcome i love you
cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

awwww thanks hun i got it the first time thought :"P



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“deleated” should be “deleted”
“more then once” should be “more than once”
“its cute” should be “it's cute”
“its so very” should be “it's so very”
“unatractive” should be “unattractive”
“your putting on” should be “you're putting on”
“cant” should be “can't”
“bodys” should be “body's”
“your just being” should be “you're just being”
“folts” should be “faults”
“forgeting” should be “forgetting”
“im yours” should be “I'm yours”
“couldnt” should be “couldn't”
“your priceless” should be “you're priceless”
“cant” should be “can't”

Great message.
Great last line.
Keep it up :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


cimmy wuv xxxooo

5 Years Ago

I agree it is important. Although I think that you think, that the grammar, is more important then t.. read more
C. Rose

5 Years Ago

Please explain to me why you refuse to edit.
Spelling errors distract the reader (especially f.. read more
cimmy wuv xxxooo

5 Years Ago

Im not refusing. I will do it when I get time.
All im saying is the poem should be allot more.. read more
wow cimmy, this is so sweet and romantic how Mark thinks u are simply perfect the way you are,what you guys have is beautiful..keep growing strong.
a few pointers though
*faults instead of folts
*bought instead of brought,
altogether its a beautiful piece love :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


cycy

6 Years Ago

ps-this made me think of just the way you are by Bruno Mars, thats the vibe i get from these words :.. read more
cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

aww thanks for the beautiful review hun :) So glad you enjoyed :)
We are lucky to have eachoth.. read more
This is a really beautiful poem, Cimmy! I can definitely tell that it's from the bottom of your heart, and very honest. And I can see from the comment below that Mark appreciates it too!

Now, I know on the last poem of yours that I read I went into spellcheck mode, but if that really upsets you, I won't do it. But when I do give advice on someone's poem, it's purely out of wanting to help - part of the reason that I write the way I do is that I've had so many people help (and critique) me along the way!

And again, if you look past the spelling, etc., the message of your poem is extremely touching and sweet, which is what ultimately counts! Thank you for sharing it; I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much I actually enjoy your reviews quite allot.
He does :)
Its not that I .. read more
Eric Pudalov

6 Years Ago

You're welcome.
This is the best best bestest. I loved enjoyed, no wonder it has 4 libraries. This touched my soul and heart. This is really good stuff.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

Wow that means so much really thank you :)
Im so glad its loved that much :))
Very sweet read, reminds me of Pink's Perfect! Priceless indeed...'change the voices in your head'...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

haha :P funny
Frieda P

6 Years Ago

They don't think so...ha, I'll tell them you said that. ;-P
cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

haha you do that :P
I hate you, two!!! Haha. You're making me jealous all over with your enviable public display of love! Ugh!!! I want a boyfriend now. :P

Well done, Cimmy. Mark's really sweet.



Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

Bullshit you could never hate me :P You love me :)
Awwww hun youll get one, I hope he treats y.. read more
Blue

6 Years Ago

*Chuckling* In the meantime, I shall content myself watching the love affairs of others. :)
cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

Awww there just a bit slow hun.... Mark took forever to find me :P
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Pax
sweet and tender, love always finds ways making imperfect, perfect. beautiful piece!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your wonderful reviews :)
You wrote it with mark's point of view. Then you used long sentences and weaved them into a unique rhyming and still managed to keep the poem look simple and elegant. Great work. Its just adorable the way you and mark here. I'm still searching for a similar person in my life. Take care both of you, keep loving each other and keep writing lovely poems. ♥♥

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

A guy will love you more then anyone one day and treat you like a princess the way you deserve to be.. read more
Penny

6 Years Ago

Awww.... that is so nice of you. I am on cloud nine now. Tenkew..
cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

haha your welcome :)
excellent poem - if only we listened to voices other than the one inside.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

Yes this is true sadly we don't. Thank you for your review :))

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Hey everyone im cimmonne (prounced simone) but everyone i know and love calls me cimmy. I'm unique and different and 100 percent me. I have a passion for writing and i want to share my writing with ev.. more..

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