remembering the stairs

remembering the stairs

 

 

 

 

five story window dressing

looking down at myself

through the pane

 

i see remnants of a heart

that once splattered from the fall

yet kept beating

 

and when i look up,

the glass a bit clearer

the sky becomes halcyon

beckoning,

 

reflecting the you

i once saw in my dreams

 

when we stood next to the sun

and the rent we afforded for the apartment

 

was paid in love.

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/10/15

Reviews

[rubie]

i love this piece. simply exquisite, really, especially the way there is a shift in perspective...looking down, then up.

it's sad, yet with a touch of optimism....

the heart can keep beating....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, rubie.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

taking the stairs can be so much more of an event than riding an elevator ;) your poem reminds me to recollect those very good experiences with "love" ... its too easy to allow the terribly painful to take a prominent position in our ol' beans! ..the best image i receive is from your closing ... it is so true that, when those in love are struggling financially, the experiences really were some of the best times of one's life ... an affordable (cheap) apartment made bright with laughter, intimate whisperings and love are the best in the world :) reminds me of San Francisco and the Haight
https://www.google.com/url?sa=i&rct=j&q=&esrc=s&source=images&cd=&cad=rja&uact=8&ved=0CAcQjRxqFQoTCMKpya_p08gCFcvUgAod96MF1Q&url=https%3A%2F%2Fen.wikipedia.org%2Fwiki%2FHaight-Ashbury&psig=AFQjCNGvLy2EwYkFCTurQGn3sbjMRzdrhA&ust=1445525797128617

enjoyed reading this morning jacob!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah those days of Haight Ashbury---city lights books, ferlinghetti and Ginsberg...wonderous times...

thank you, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..i think so too ...but innocence seems lost post hippie days :( perhaps we just sobered up eh!? :))

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... reminds me of the song, Because of you, God made Oklahoma...
A Calico cat and a two room flat.... truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Pat.

j.

[surething]

This is giving me emotions that I do not even know what exactly they are. It may have not been what you wanted me to understand, but I got that even once the heart is crushed by something it keeps going. Once you realize the hear keeps going, that is when the sky becomes clear, and one can allow his heart to be able to love again. This was a great poem. I loved it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really like this interpretation, thank you, surething.

j.

[Corset]

now this is tugging on memories we do not share, but ..but ...but ...such sweet silly memories they are, I know of a splendid space to rent with the most sublime words and lines ever written, but alas, that space has already been filled.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Corset...

j.

[Insight "MH"]

So delicate and so gorgeous. A tingle in my heart started from the begging till the end.
Thank you for sharing this fine piece.

Insight.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,

j.

[Cassie]

Perhaps having no review to put down is a review on its own, You are always so good and I love that you are always able to write on all subjects.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cassie.

j.

[emmajoy]

' .. when we stood next to the sun.. and - '

A wistful piece of writing today, jacob - introspective; looking away from the now but upwards on self and another from the past. Wondering - having read again if pane is pain or.. a word used, not sure - (again a hint to your mood when you wrote this). The last three lines really reach a somewhere deeply stored when you both craved for so much in life and of love. :( A beautiful heart.touching poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, emma.

j.

[Clara]

I find this poem particularly beautiful; sentimental and bittersweet.
Reminiscent of a much happier time perhaps.

All we need is love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Clara....

j.

[RomaJ]

"Remembering the stairs" very vivid emotions your poem evokes. ah, it's like falling in love as I read this. It gives me chills. I love the last stanza. resonating. Oh, the days when all we needed to survive...was love. Lovely piece, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, RomaJ.

j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ps

nice to see you back again!

[RomaJ]

Thank you j. It's good to be back and to read you again.