the violin playing in her eyes

the violin playing in her eyes

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


the violin playing in her eyes

 

 

 

recluse spider bite

wound, similar to your love

deadly to the heart

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/13/16

© 2016 jacob erin-cilberto


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1VJ
Violins (their inescapable melancholic sound) and spiders in one toxic bite, interminably stinging. So succinct but packs a punch.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you, Paloma...

j.
Exotic title: short and sweet verse!

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you, Tomas.

j.
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AK
This is........ _______ Good. Hey can some people go look at my poem. Look up "Mommy" And the writer is me "AK"

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you, AK....

j.
Wow! Crimson_ish explanation is better than the poem!

Jacob you been outdone!

Regards,
Al

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

i've been outdone many times before, my friend :))))

j.
This is a really interesting analogy, pondering over it, it discloses a new sphere of love, it indeed hurts like a poisonous spider bite, toxic for years when it ruins you. Especially with your title, it's got this tinge of terror and melancholy at same time, with maddened violins playing in the background. It's a really interesting and refreshing read! Thank you for this!

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your really kind review and insights into the workings of this piece, Crimson_ish...read more
Love is like a spider that bites the very sensitive part of us. When we are being abused, it is not love anymore...so it's time to walk away.

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

what you say is so true, Dhaye...thank you for your words,

j.
Stunning, in a word. Not much else needs to be said.

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, DIVYA....

j.
Sometimes the smallest group of words can be larger than life -- such is this, a poem, straight to the heart.

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, KL

j.
Ouchy... I can feel the heart rotting away right now.

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your reply, Dale....hope you are well...

j.
When love is fatal, it is not true love and certainly not worth it. I liked the title of this one. Some people are always complaining and make you think they are helpless....don't trust that violin. Lydi**

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

yes, that violin..or ....well...thank you, lydi....appreciate your words...

j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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