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Do not Disturb

Do not Disturb

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

 

Do not Disturb

 

 

 

sensibility checked out of the motel
reason became a vacancy sign

and love left without paying its bill,
now the neon light flickers with rage

and old age,
a bunch of rooms with empty beds
no one sleeps together in harmony
anymore

they stand at attention
with threats as bedfellows
munching midnight snacks

staring at the closet door
listening for monsters
praying,

the cleaning service quit years ago
the manager threw up his arms in surrender
and moved to a new country

but the lights keep flickering
enticing hearts to stop for comfort
and empty the closets of old woes
and restlessness

put sheets of poetry on the beds
let minds roll over in peace,
and maybe pay for another night 

just to feel safe for a page or two.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/7/16

© 2016 jacob erin-cilberto


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I just kept thinking safety in familiarity. Better the devil you know. Thought provoking pen Jacob

Chris

Posted 5 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Years Ago

thank you for your review, Chris.
j.
I don't know what to say exactly but I do like, as I've mentioned before, your crossing the line between nouns and verbs, i.e., love left without paying its bill. Lots of great images--the cleaning service left years ago, put sheets of poems on the bed.

Posted 5 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, Leslie.
j.
this is kind of a wicked weaving of very real old age stuff and conditions of the nation ... as well as an appropriate opiate for any and all involved ... from relatives of the aged to poets to worn out to feel the streets ... thank you for a very stimulating read ..just another poem that i really like from your pages sir! :)
E.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, E.

your support is always encouraging...

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Beautiful, how mind overtakes the heart?... sometimes. But where are we heading to with all the reason? Am sure it's obscure for everyone. But it is a fact to accept and work on. Thank you for sharing it. Oh, the first two lines play an important role.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your words, Queen...

j.
Jacob Jacob, over the years you continually amaze me with your poetry and to tell you the truth, one reason I haven't left Wc is you, your poetry which completely sweeps me off my feat, amazes me and of cos gets my muse back. I hope you are not planning to close account cos if you do, you will totally disappoint me. Well done well done sir.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you, Cassie, for your kind words....i am quite moved by what you said.

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" A bunch of room with empty beds, no one sleeps together anymore." Thanks for this marvelous and wise metaphor---After hearing Pres. Obama's Memorial speech today, all I can think about is that this poem sounds just like the HOTEL AMERICANA(:) Thanks for this excellent write.
A forever friend,
Doug

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your very kind words, Doug...
j.
poetdoug

7 Years Ago

Heartfelt for sure.
I really appreciates the way you used metaphor and personification here. Your laguage is quite superb. Well done, sir.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, Onyia-ota,

j.
Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chukwuebuka Benson

7 Years Ago

You're welcome, sir!
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Your poem takes me on a nice, imaginative journey, it is studded with picturesque expressions, I especially like the last stanza. A smooth and vivid write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you, Vanessa...

j.
I always feel like motels are some sort of icon of romantic angst and the approach this poem took to describing emotional (maybe even physical?) tension in relation to a motel was really captivating and emphatic.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, Monica...

j.
as long as it isn't bates motel, the emptiness of the motel, the flickering of the neon light, the desolate eeriness suggested this motel is haunted lol.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you, andrew...

j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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