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she, and the other she

she, and the other she

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

she, and the other she


satin stains,
composure averted
his eyes divulged the secret

her suitcase by the door
his packed tightly with regrets
half the drawers empty
a space in his life

the other sees him in the mirror
and winces,
she didn't want to cause this
but her lipstick didn't know when to quit

now the taxi pulls up
his dreams ride away
leaving him paying the fare

"and the bags fly free"



erin-cilberto
12/3/16

© 2016 jacob erin-cilberto


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Your scenarios are better than Stephen King mysteries, Jacob...such a pleasure to read!

Posted 4 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

i appreciate that Kelly...used to be a pretty big fan of his...in his old days...
thank you.<.. read more
Our baggage always comes along for the ride. Your words paint a plaintive scene. I am gobsmacked by the line about her lipstick.

Posted 4 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

hi Anne...thank you for your kind words...

hope you are doing well....miss seeing mor.. read more
ahahahah "and the bags fly free" ...i am sure she was not such a bag to begin with .. i was all caught up in this melodrama of splitting ..i see this relationship kind of doomed from the start ..as they are in some one star motel room .. love the mirror...the suitcase ... but especially this line
" ...her lipstick didn't know when to quit"
.. high expectations and passions must fall to earth eventually :( ... as this one did .. seems the poor ol' boy has suffered the ending of two at once eh!?
E.

Posted 4 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

thank you for your words, E.

we make our own beds sometimes...and not very neatly.read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

yes indeed we do :{
Always say. If you play away. Make sure it's far far away. Cause when the main woman leaves your life. The structure begins to crumble.

Posted 4 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

yes, the structure would certainly do that, wouldn't it? and we all need some structure whether we a.. read more
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Gee
The next best thing now the best thing until the next next best thing appears on the horizon. Morning Jacob

Posted 4 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

Morning, Gee...

and thanks for the visit and words,

j.
I sometimes wonder whether the other woman leaves her mark like lipstick as a territorial thing or more deviously, to speed up the processes, so she is no longer the other woman but the new replacement.Impeccable Jacob Style of writing, supremo!

Posted 4 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, andrew.
j.
A inane lapse of judgment and a relationship is in ruins. I can see this scenario clearly, too bad he couldn't. Good write, j.

Posted 4 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

perceptive comment, Ted...thanks for the visit.

j.
jacob,
How many losses do we experience in a life time? Somehow in time they are filled with something or someone new. This poem was a true memorial to loss and we need to grieve. Eventually we may understand better what the lesson needed to be from said experience. I wonder if that is where you were coming from as it is where my head was at. Well bless you sir. Kathy

Posted 4 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

i like where you went with this, Kathy....

a true perspective...thank you for your wo.. read more
lol.. and the bags fly free" I love the ending! The entire poem has its own aura, you take the reader to the situation, breaking down the situation moment by moment, great work Jacob!

Posted 4 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, Michael.

j.
The consequences of one's actions...

Lucky is that woman who can easily get out of such "scary place"...unlike other women who are real living martyrs... (:

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jacob erin-cilberto

4 Years Ago

yes, i know a couple of those martyrs...and unfortunately a couple could get out but won't....
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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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