motions in an apathetic circle

motions in an apathetic circle

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

motions in an apathetic circle



i want to be intellectual,
but simple

i want to write deeply metaphorical poetry
yet easily imagined and related to

i want to be sophisticated in my manner
yet approachable

i want to write tragedy
in comic tones

i want to be me,
yet Gary Cooper, Lawrence Ferlinghetti and Bogart
smoking a cigarette on a dark corner of life

i want to love you till the end of time,
but be by myself more often than not

i want to write you engaging poetry
without caring if it is accepted or rejected

i want to be immune
yet feel every ache, cut, scar
that bleeds existence into a poet

i want to be you
not me,
never me

i want to live outside myself
in the safety of my own mind

i want you to understand
all that i don't
and hold that in highest regard

without regards to what i write
after all
it's all just a bluff

and i am holding a dead hand
even as the fingers still touch
the breathing keys.


erin-cilberto
6/7/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto


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Wow I got no words-- me--i got no words... Ah-ha, but it seems you are in fact all of the above and then some in this great smash smack of emotions you wrote! I love this every last drop.

Posted 5 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Years Ago

thank you so much, Bad bunny...i am surprised to see this one resurfacing...and glad it works for re.. read more
Robert Trakofler

5 Years Ago

yes this i am shelving
J.
I almost missed this one! May I say this is top notch stuff! Not that I don't enjoy your current work, but I think it is possibly your best . . . to me (right along side your poem about a Bronx street turning into a wave). Love that line near the end, "after all/it's all just a bluff." What an honest confession! Are we not walking contradictions!? This poem expresses so well how we live out so many convolutions. "I want to live outside myself/in the safety of my own mind." Oh how bi-polar are are desires . . . wanting to go beyond our fears and phobias, prejudices, self deceit , etc . . . yet not willing to give up the very things that beset us so.

Wonderful and exacting poem my friend. Congratulation.
Tom

Posted 5 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Years Ago

thank you so much for your very kind words, Tom.
j.
My first impression was but you do all that Jacob. And then I got deeper into the poem and realised more.
So excellent writing by, (I will still say it) someone I regard as a master.

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, Ken.
j.
Your "wants" are not only contradictory, they are virtually impossible--which may well explain why you so deeply desire them in your life.
Love poker; sometimes my lousy pair of deuces wins!
A profound and pleasing poem that exudes quality; radiates insight

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

sometimes the smallest hands come out on top...so true..
thank you, Jimmy.
I want to live outside myself in the safety of my own mind. Wow.

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you, Leslie....

j.
dear Jacob... poetry is like a game of poker...
a matter of luck... a pair... a full house...
an ill wind or winner take all... inspiration is fragile like a tender kiss or a flower... truly, Pat

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

yes, fragile like a tender kiss or flower...so true.
thank you, Pat.
j.
Yes I to want to be all that lol. One forgets oneself when one wants to immerse into the other with the shadow of doubt lingering in the background where you want your protected armour on. I thought the last stanza really had a twist somewhat Alfred Hitchcock like " holding a dead hand.... breathing keys.somewhat dark.

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your insights and kind review, andrew.
j.
I really like this! The format you put it in is really good.

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Angel...

j.
Angel

6 Years Ago

You're welcome..
wow this was good! bravo!

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you!
j.
I want to be the author of this poem :P we can be whatever we imagine ourselves to be, at least in our own minds? I don't want to be Bogart though..."To have and to have not", my favorite of yours I think ...

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you my poetic friend, for your kind words.
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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