a Heaven's haiku

a Heaven's haiku

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

a Heaven's haiku

 

 

the lost explorer,

gnarly stars not withstanding

penance, his flashlight

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/1/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto


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Such deep thoughts in three short lines, Jacob. A sinner doomed to wander the night with only his flashlight lighting the way....perhaps in the inner city where the stars dare not twinkle. A lot to read in between the lines of this one....I liked it. Lydi**

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

and you are one who reads much between lines, my friend....such an astute lyric reader.....
t.. read more
I see a man finding his way with the tools he has been gifted...deep haiku, it was a pleasure.

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you, Mr. e
I think we are sky bound; but being earth bound in life, we forget where we're headed. I'm so glad to live in the county where I can appreciate the stars. Living in the city doused their light in many more ways than one. Love this.

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you, Linda...and yes...me too..living out of town, lots of trees but i get a great view of sta.. read more
Linda Marie Van Tassell

3 Years Ago

Here! Here! I grew up in the city as well, nothing as big as the Bronx for sure, but still the cit.. read more
Always figured any penance offered served to make the sinner feel better--as if he or she had, somehow, come closer to "squaring things." Didn't seem to me that God kept track of such things.
He appeared more interested in the purity of one's heart.
Stunning little number, Jacob!


Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

yes, the heart...i agree...thank you again for your wonderful support of my writing, Jimmy.
j.. read more
did you know that it's actually better to hike at night without a flashlight, the moonlight guides you. your eyes adjust. if you want to see the big picture, forget about the spotlight, you'll find your place among the stars regardless

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

i can see that philosophy ringing true...

thank you , Ana

j.
Makes sense to me. I believe God orders angels to take away the batteries from the arrogant lost souls that murdered their way through life.

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

i like that thought, Relic...

j.
'I was lost - now I am found' resonated within, as I read through your exquisite write ... just my kind of read - :-)

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, Phill..
j.
Ok, I don't understand at all... but I was here, and gave it a try.................lol

Jazzy

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thanks for trying Jazzy...but whatever you see is what it is...
j.
J. J.  Nightingale

3 Years Ago

Ok.........YRW........
Haven't read such an intellectually constructed poem in a while.
Fantastic senryu.

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words,
j.
The religious theme reborn in a well constructed senyru Jacob. Guilt the master of the Catholic psyche.

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

yes, you are so right...it certainly is.
thank you, John.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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