August 31st

August 31st

 

 

sun shines intently

streets become rivers of mold

ruined structures weep

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/1/17

Reviews

[kitty]

So little words to paint an acurate pen picture. Well done you! Picking up the pieces is the difficult part.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes it is, Kitty....yes it is...
thank you...
j.

[Zugzwang]

I think the haiku is a particularly appropriate form for this most serious of subjects.
May the recovery be swift.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Z.
j.

[Tom]

That shinning sun now mocks what went before?

An astute poetic interlude Jacob, lets pray it's not the calm before another storm of strife and tribulation?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Tom...
j.

[Jon Roggie]

Nicely said, my friend.
Meanwhile ashes fall around.
Other stories missed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Jon.
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I have friends who live throughout Texas, and each have been spared. Your words as always are most profound and palpable, Jacob...thank you for penning them so eloquently.

I hope you have a wonderful Labor Day weekend!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kelly....sad and scary for sure...and when i think...back in the late seventies, early eighties, my parents lived in Port Arthur...

thank you for your kind words, Kelly---rebuilding their lives is going to take much persistence and faith...

[Sami Khalil]

We pray for Tx. We hope they can build back their homes and lives. It will take time but hope prevails like your compassionate words...:)...........

[jacob erin-cilberto]

they must...have to move forward somehow...and there has been much generosity from people everywhere...wish we were that generous all the time...
j.

[Sami Khalil]

So true. You are welcome...:).............

[Bacchus]

does the weeping turn to mold...
or does the mold turn to weeping

probably occurs at the same time...
that mold... rust and moths can destroy

and so can swirling rain... hmmmm

[jacob erin-cilberto]

they sure are having a tough go of it...rebuilding will be tough...thank you, Bacchus.
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

This perfect senryu mourns the hurricane's devastation. Stunning metaphor and personification of contaminated streets and homes weeping floodwater. You paint an indelibly sad picture with eloquent words. Praying.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Annette.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The aftermath of 'uncle' Harvey write told in another apt and poignant senryu Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John.
j.