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A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

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spare me the incidentals
i don't care....
yes, i care about you
and love you for what i think you are

aside from that, i don't want to know
my truth is a generalized essay of you
specifics be damned

i will read you as i deem
you are my improbable dream

and the little lies
won't to me compromise

what i intend to feel
regardless of the details
that may congeal
my heart

into nothing
but a viscera's part
of a closed eye.



erin-cilberto
5/5/19

© 2019 jacob erin-cilberto


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J.
interesting lines in this piece. "I . . . love you for what I think you are." self-deception or honest acknowledgement? " I don't want to know . . . essay of you." Again, don't get in my way of relating to you . . . don't try to change my mind with the true reality of you! Even beyond that I don't want my heart involved . . . it's just to difficult to deal with. This speaker seems tired of life . . . and just wants occasional eros to know he's still alive. Again, a melancholy poem, a sense of self-imposed exile.
T.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

i really appreciate how you pick apart my poetry....in such a good way, you delve deep into the line.. read more
That's unbounded passion...that "whatever I shall do I shall do unconditionally"...not the easiest of things to do...unpleasant incidents and bitter truths sneak in to impose certain conditions...but that's the fun of it...how one stays free of them all and goes on...unbridled

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your insightful review, Vatsal,
j.
Sometimes it is better not to know what we thought we wanted to

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

that is so true, Lyn...
thanks
j.
I always said I wanted to know the whole truth.....all of it....until I saw the whole truth. Now I know it's so much easier to love blind.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

yes, maybe that old saying is true....what we don't know can't hurt us...thank you for your response.. read more
My father once said women marry men hoping to change them, and men marry women hoping they’ll never change. Perhaps some truth in his statement, though we can see it play out on both sides. Too bad we don’t see it sooner.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

and i think when we marry, we should accept the person we fell in love with in the first place...why.. read more
Some people, the more you know them, the less easy it is to love them. In such cases, I can understand how your narrator draws certain lines to keep a situation manageable. I, on the other hand, do not have much self-restraint, so it's best for me not to tolerate someone, trying to love on principle only! I love how you deliver equal measures gentleness & bluntness (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you so much for your kind and understanding words, Margie.
j.
this was the downfall of both my marriages , they loved me for what they wanted me to be .... but when i would not morph into their dream person it just didn't bode well.
Always true to myself and if others see me differently .. well, i am afraid this lady has no revision to make either lol.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

smart, yes, true to yourself...took me three to figure that out...:)
thank you for relating t.. read more
beauty is in the eye of the beholder and one mans meat is another mans poison... some times, and for a variety of reasons we make the wrong choices and yet in spite of all the warnings and signs, we run with it blindly.... maybe... Whether wrong or write.... this is a great little post jacob

N

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

such wonderful insight...thank you for your words, Neville,
j.
Neville

1 Year Ago

my very sincere pleasure
N
Very cleverly written, great flow and telling it as it is! Pardon all the its! I like this Jacob, it’s all class!

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

it's it's it's really okay....ha ha. thanks, andrew
j.
One person's perception of someone is not always the same as another's. Everyone is flawed, it just depends on what we view as significant and choose to turn a blind eye to. Acceptance is important in love but sometimes overlooking too much is a dangerous thing and can lead to an unhealthy and unbalanced relationship. Love is truly blind in some cases. :) You always hope it's in a good way though. Just my thoughts, as always, I enjoyed.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

wow, thank you for that insight, Ana...so true so true...and thank you for adding your words to this.. read more

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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