the Final Tea Time (Green Jacket and Tie required)

the Final Tea Time (Green Jacket and Tie required)

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

the Final Tea Time (Green Jacket and Tie required)

 

 

 

swish, swoosh, swash

like an iron making contact 

with that little white orb

in the tall grass of life

the rough,

 

greens are smooth and even

like temperament needs be

when clouds threaten to postpone

our journey

 

cause us to take a drop

somewhere in the fairway of wisdom

we think the right choice of club

but decisions are often tenuous

 

our shot at life,

may find our dreams

falling into the cup of hope

 

friends and family give us that light applause

swish, swoosh, swash

 

did you hear me coming 

down the 18th hole of redemption

i think i see the eagle flying

 

a little birdie told me so

just before i signed the scorecard

that kept track of my existence.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/25/19 

© 2019 jacob erin-cilberto


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never thought of keeping my score ... afraid if i try i will be helplessly lost in the rough .. stuck in the trap ... i went golfing once with two friends from HS .. i did my best to say no but they convinced me .. so i went .. i didn't cheat .. after about 4 holes of 9 they decided to pay through so i was left behind ... i ditched the score card at about 98 strokes .. but played the whole course and found them relaxing in the club house ..needless to say .. i was not invited again :} thanks for sharing your green day sir .. fun experience for me
E.

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

i appreciate that you could find a way to relate to this, E. thanks for sharing your experience...... read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

:) ..................
Life is like a round of golf, but pray tell, what do I do if I've landed in an exotic birds nest at the top of a tree and playing the shot will smash the eggs and mean the possible extinction of a species?
A speedy response would be appreciated, as its quite tricky clinging to the top of a tree with a golf club and typing at the same time. 😀
I like this one Jacob. The many similarities tween life and golf will now never leave me.
I think this may be a hole in one 😀

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

thank you Lorry...and here is my advice...Take a Drop, You are only losing one stroke, and the eggs .. read more
Wow Jacob... I was my father's Caddy when he played golf...
so I can conceive your approach to romance. Now that I am
green with envy, I applaud your genius extraordinary. truly, Pat

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, Pat...and sharing that you were your dad's caddy...i used to play a l.. read more
Patricia Wedel

5 Months Ago

Yes... very interesting... a good reason for exercise and even to clear your mind of nonsense and co.. read more
Never been interested in golf, but with Pebble Beach just down the road, we get golf breezes around these parts! *wink! wink!* I love how your golf references seem to be tongue-in-cheek rather than hoity-toity, which elevates the game in my opinion! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

wow, Pebble Beach just down the road....that is pretty neat...love it when they play there.
i.. read more

I have never played golf and nor do I intend to, but that doesn't mean I dont have the greatest respect for whoever scores a hole in one ... and which I respectfully suspect you may have done here sir..... N

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, Neville,
j.
Very clever! My family on my Dad's side are all golfers, so although I don't play myself I can appreciate this and my family would also! I like the notion of a scorecard tracking your existence, it gave me the impression of a repetitive existence, round and round the course we go....trying to impress and to succeed, taking the rough with the smooth, grey clouds coming to threaten our plans. I thought this was very clever and enjoyed the play on words.

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

thank you for your words and sharing your experience, Laura,
j.
' our shot at life, - may find our dreams - falling into the cup of hope '

When it comes to metaphors and swinging a club, you near enough beat everyone in the roughest manner, sir J. (Sorry, will stop with my try at... not succeeding with the same!) Few people have the skill and imagination to create such language.. here both are incredible.. Green with envy I am. What you've said within it all is so true too.. life is the roughest game, that's for sure.

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

you succeed quite well, em...you have a sharp wit which i truly enjoy...
thank you for your w.. read more
Even more clever than most others from you, J. Must say I identify with this one. I'm ashamed to say I spend most of my time off the fairway, plucking balls from the woods and water, too slow to the 18th. No green jacket for me, but I'll tip my Irish beer to you as I watch from the sandtrap.

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

you sound like my dad...when he played golf....he would get into the woods and never drop out...he w.. read more
Wow, a golf metaphor. This is certainly different and I enjoyed it! You are so clever. "birdie".....oh yea. I tip my hat to you! Lydi**

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

I am surprised and pleased that some are enjoying this..thank you, Lydi...
j.
Lydia

5 Months Ago

You should not be surprised, Jacob. Give yourself more credit! You are a talented poet.
you're just too good at metaphor writing ..smooth operator at using just the write words..at the right lines."a little birdie told me so"..like that
nice work as always

Posted 5 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Months Ago

thank you for your kind review, Fran,
j.

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Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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