grins to riches

grins to riches

 

 

the palace of you

defamed crown

diamond studded throne

 

i am the beggar

asking simply for a touch

a brush of lips against an indigent cheek

the only handout presumed

 

i am on the steps

trying to get close to your heart

are you willing to give love to a commoner?

 

i don't want to steal your diamonds

or your crown,

just a bit of your heart

even if i have to pilfer

 

with my oh so poor smile...

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/4/19

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

Grins are riches and a guffaw would fill the bank. We can look around thinking I'm not good enough, while the other party is doing the same.
A little bit of the Prince and the Pauper...or should I say the Princess and the Pauper.
But then all you're asking is 'just a little bit of your heart now baby'. No foolin...just Joplin.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Ted,
j.

[Karmee]

this one seems kind of sad but yet touching, nicely represented

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words silent k.
j.

[Robert Trakofler]

that grin doesn't seem all that poor of a smile in this writing dear Jacob:) but that which you wish to pilfer is the finest treasure available! like the indignant line:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, bunny.
j.

[barleygirl]

Your poem brings to mind a common pitfall of love/romance (in my opinion) . . . how we often feel inferior to the object of our affection, thereby putting him/her on a pedestal where we are a little bit afraid to approach & so things stay stuck as a mutual-admiration cliff hanger *sigh!* Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you walking to the edge of the cliff with me, Margie.
j.

[Lorry]

I made the mistake of reading Sir Noodle of einsteinias review first and I completely agree, although it reminded me of a royal version of the godfather/mafia movies, where at the dons daughters wedding he must say yes to a favour.
Sometimes barriers break and we find that one who is out of our league, but sometimes it is only self doubt that puts them on such a pedestal.
It also reminds me of where I am now, living in an area where the local residents assume I am the help. I just tell them Im a secret millionaire. They don't need to know the place came with the job 😀
Everyone loves a tale of the underdog Jacob and you have managed that to stunning effect here. An honest heartfelt plea for one moment, just one. Brilliant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh i love this Lorry...Godfather....made me think of Luca Brazzi..."Godfather, thank you for inviting me to your daughter's wedding on the day of your daughters wedding"
thank you for the smile...
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

the humility and simple humanity in this is very appealing .. reminded me of the caste system of India .. an "untouchable" reaching out :( what would i do???? hmmmmmmmmm not sure about a kiss sir; but i think i would take the hand ;) what a huge story told in this says i! in such a very little space .. novels are written around such things .. movies made ... love the humility sir! grins to riches ... might just do the trick right!? I have never been able to smile and show me teeth .. thin lips and overbite refuse me ... no wonder i have skirted working "poor" all me life :)))))))))))))))))))) poor but happy i must say
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i agree with your last line for sure...i lived a paycheck away from the street for so many years...but now still teach and also draw some social...what a wonderful thing to have a tiny cushion...thank you for your words, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes it is .. a wonderful thing .. after the long struggle .. respite in our old age .. not that you are old jacob ;)))))))))))

[Fay Slimm]

A very poetic way of beginning this well crafted appeal - - "the palace of you" has all the hall-marks of talented afters.. with an end stanza to sigh for too. A gem of a write jacob - keep smiling and for sure you will win that rich heart ........ Fay

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Fay,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

A smile is an excellent way to break the ice. Who can resist the warmth of a genuine smile. I am thinking nothing ventured, nothing gained. Take a risk and go for it, but go slowly.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, SLOWLY....some of us after awhile only know that speed...thank you, Chris.
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Slow and steady wins the race, if you want something worthwhile, that is.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Linda Marie,
j.

[David Klay]

I like this. It is sometimes hard to believe that people aren't after something and just genuinely want to share their love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, David...thank you for the read and comment,
j.