a place for us

 

a place for us

 

 

roughly speaking,

i want to hear your tender tenders

whispered to me gently

 

my reply a raspy kiss

a slow cough of love

even when i cover my mouth

 

unsaid is said

over is over

and beginnings long

 

for the chance

 

                               to stay

 

 

where you are.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/7/19

Reviews

[gram linski]

there always seems to be this elemental sadness in your wonderful poetry, but you do wear it well, another great read

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah Rod Stewart..."you wear it well, a little old fashioned but that's alright"
thank you, gram..
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Life takes us from one end of the spectrum to the latter end and how we like the to rerun the beginnings.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...appreciate your visit and words.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

It is the unsaid which can have most impact. So important is communication in relationships. Hold back and it could be at your peril. Misunderstandings happen so easily. "where are you?" You have lost her already. I also thought of that wonderful movie West Side Story. Saw it when I was 16. That's where I went with this one Jacob.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, wonderful flick...even though the main characters did not sing their own songs...lip synced but oh well.
a modern day Romeo and Juliet.
thank you for your words, Chris.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This immediately took me to West Side Story and "Somewhere (There's a Place for Us)". In this is a deep sadness as even in later life with raspy, wheezing breaths we long for love and to return to the youth we once knew for the love we once knew and felt!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, John,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

The unsaid is often said, true enough. Thing is, when it comes to relationships, communication is the key. Without it, that cough could be just a cough. No one can be sure. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sounds like Freud...sometimes a cough is just a cough...love it.
thank you, Lydi..
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

I'm not a shrink, but I play one on line! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...love it....