Beached

Beached

 

 

sandcastle blue light

whimsical grains of splashed love

heart sadly crumbles

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/15/19

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Love your fresh unexpected imagery! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Margie,
j.

[Pure Evil]

I agree, very well done with the wording. Excellent work

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pure Evil,
j.

[Pure Evil]

No, thank YOU for sharing it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words Jacob. Made the reader understand the place and the ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Lydia Shutter]

Sandcastles are never meant to be permanent....and I guess neither are some relationships. Still, it hurts when they are washed out to sea. So much said in three lines! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi...
j.

[Terpsichore]

Love is a shifting sand... so very difficult to keep one's balance. My heart has crumbled more than once.

T.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true, true...i think that crumbling thing is pretty widespread...
thank you, T.
j.

[R.E. Ray]

I see the night’s tide washing away what heart and hands created, perhaps as nature intended. Still, it hurts the heart to see this destruction.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, R.E.
j.

[EileenMarie]

I love Haiku's. They can pack a powerful punch of emotions in a short thoughtful way. This is beautiful. I thought of a child building a sandcastle with a parent ( writer ) and the heart crumbling is joyful in that you feel the good ache of love. Maybe I am wrong but that is how I envisioned it.
Great write Jacob!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like your insights, EileenMarie...
thank you for your words,
j.

[Shoshana]

This is beautiful.
-Shoshana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Shoshana,
j.

[Dave]

As children, living down the shore, the joy we had in building our wonderful sandcastles.
As adults the devastation we felt when they, the real and the imaginary ones get washed away
or simply disappear. Nicely written.

Take care - Dave

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Dave,
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

No matter how grand, everything that we try to construct in this life is swept away. Really, you can only take to the grave the memories, the love, and the emotions that you feel. Once expired, everything disappears.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh so so true, Linda....so true...thank you for your insightful words...
j.