a good present in a bad present

a good present in a bad present

 

 

in days of unrest

flannel flirtations

wrap around covert glances

 

she walks into my life

as an auburn leaf floats softly to the ground

and winter's welcome is warmed

by her touch

 

as her lips make introductions

to mine

i am swept into a bonfire

that leaf is a part of

the auburn scent of the flame

flannel flirtations

have ignited

 

she is an early Christmas gift

in my October

and i, in my waning years

in days of unrest

 

unwrap us both

saving the bow

and the tag that says

 

"forever"---

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/16/19

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

I especially like the way "flannel flirtations" flows...and the image it conjures for me. I remember a boyfriend wearing flannel when I lived in cooler climes. There is something about the feel of flannel. An early Christmas gift.....an older man meets a love interest and hopes it will last till the end of his life. So romantic and yet there is a sadness between the lines. Again, great alliteration. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Lydi,
j.

[Cortez]

It say that the writer is mesmerized by the love he sees, and feels. Earth enter, stays with the writer. Nice similes of affection.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Cortez,
j.

[R.E. Ray]

An old flame, preserved in his flannel, kept by the fire... if not consumed in the heat of the past. Seems you've captured the beauty and the burden of love here, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, R.E.
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Each day is a blessing with gifts that abound if we but have eyes to see. Your eyes always see, preserved forever in the gift of your words. Lovely!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Linda,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful memory shared Jacob. In the end, the good and bad become okay. The word, forever can become less true. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow! I am bowled over by the romance of this piece set in autumn, be it actual or allegorical. Wonderful to fee;l that depth of devotion sent in both directions, whatever time of life it arrives! Beautifully written as always in a free verse, descriptive.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, John,
j.

[Dave Brown]

It sounds to me, that this more than pleasant scenario is potentially salvaging your dislike for the upcoming winter season
I think!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Dave,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

'She is an early Christmas gift in my October,'. Saving the bow and the tag that says 'forever'. I like the sentimentality attached to the bow and the tag. A good present in a bad present makes me think of a spark of light in a dark tunnel. It offers a cautious ray of hope. That is always to be welcomed. A little warmth makes a big difference in a cold environment.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh it sure does, Chris...
thank you for your words,
j.

[Perdition]

Ah...The ever-present "she"...that thing we associate with a woman BUT...many times it is the representation of something much deeper than the physical she...Not that the physical she is not deep enough but how we poets do love that "she"....boat, awareness, wisdom, love, winter, spring, luna...She is everywhere and everything. She is it... Loved it and thanks~

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your response is better than the poem...and is a poem in itself..thanks so much Perdition.
j.

[Perdition]

Hardly, but thanks and back at ya ...Perdition!