stranded

stranded

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

stranded

 

 

 

Macrame endings

a square knot

tied down your loose frilly threads

too much for you

to be bound in lattice adornment

 

polished phrases

don't comply

or see eye to eye

with your dread of a thread

of commitment

 

would that you loved me back enough

we could have furnished our lives

with cozy slip knots

but you slipped away

 

into your frayed world of logic

and our

Macrame endings

 

sent me to find accord

elsewhere.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/4/19

© 2019 jacob erin-cilberto


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This is really beautiful and makes me think of those large macramé wall hangings that you can buy. Beautiful from a distance, they encompass a lot of open spaces - a whole love of crevices for dust. If this is analogous of any relationship, perhaps it's best laying in the dustbin of history. They all fray with time any way. Your eyes always see with such a unique point of view. I really admire that.

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jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

i really appreciate this review...it is better than the poem itself...yes, damn those crevices....ne.. read more
A slip knot, pretty lady can escape from.
"would that you loved me back enough
we could have furnished our lives
with cozy slip knots
but you slipped away"
I did like the above lines. Always a pleasure to read your work.
Coyote

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jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

thank you for your kind comments, Coyote,
j.
Coyote Poetry

2 Days Ago

You are welcome Jacob.
Something so intricate takes a lot of commitment to create and there’s little scope for love when logic takes over and we are just left with ‘what ifs’. I love the delightful metaphors you used here Jacob. Beautifully written.

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jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

thank you for your kind review, DIVYA,
j.
jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

and as Petula Clark once sang.."there's a Cat in the Window"
Perhaps strands from threads never truly knotted. I admit I wasn't familiar with the word, Macrame, so I looked it up. Interesting that "Macrame" uses knotting (rather than weaving or knitting) techniques, which makes this the ideal metaphor for marriage and other intimate relationships. Is that where "tie the knot" originated? I'm assuming so. Enjoyed this one, J.

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jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

aw thanks R.E. that is so kind of you to say....i wish i had you in my class...you would be a great.. read more
R.E. Ray

2 Days Ago

If I'm ever in your area (I live in southeastern IN), I'll stop by, if only to confuse the class. ".. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

actually you would fit right in...a community college with many non-traditional students....so come .. read more
dear Jacob... an unfinished sweater to hold your heart...
but then we had to part... after a never beginning love affair...
wondering why under a rainy sky-- the thunder rolled and
lightening struck where love should have grown... truly, Pat

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jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

geez, Pat....as usual....your reviews are so poetic...and in this case...better than the poem itself.. read more
Patricia Wedel

2 Days Ago

I really like the line "with cozy slip knots"...
it is important to do a lot of mooring to k.. read more
Love the pun - a great laughing groan at 'accord' Wonderful

Posted 2 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

i figured someone would groan over that...ha ha...
thank you, Michael...you made my morning, .. read more
So good Jacob. Some relationships are always going to end this way sadly. Your poem so visual and I kept thinking of knitting and dropped stitches leaving great gaping holes. Love lost in space. Like where you took me with this one.

Chris

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jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

and i like where it took you, Chris...as always, thank you for your thoughtful review on this poem.... read more
Within this woven knit, she wanted no strings attached. Great writing J.

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jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

thank you, andrew.
j.
your ink so eloquently and in such a captivating way pierces
through the readers’ psyche and lingers. the imagery, always
uniquely compelling. i’m always in awe of your poetic artistry,
that it’s almost impossible for me to express

either way, it’s always a pleasure to re’visit your art.

thank you for sharing ~ x

Posted 2 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

thank you for your kind review, barrie.
j.
ms. barrie

2 Days Ago

you’re so very welcomed, jacob

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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