immovable feast

immovable feast

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


immovable feast

 

 

 

drifting mantis preys

on flower bed victim lies

impetuous end

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/5/19

© 2019 jacob erin-cilberto


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Impetuous can be brave and passionate. Not a bad death I’d say. And on a flower bed too.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

i like your positive take on this...dying a damn happy death...
thanks, DIVYA,
j.
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DIVYA

1 Month Ago

You’re welcome, Jacob.
Impetuousness has almost always spelled the end of love...but having your head bitten off will definitely put an end to it.
The female has always had the power...males only think it's them.
Brute strength is not the same thing.
Gives a whole new meaning to 'hi honey, I'm home.'

Tells a lot in a few syllables j.
Well done.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind review...and yes, they do have the power.
j.
The preying mantis is indeed a strange enough insect . . . wonder how he manages to stay so slim!?
T

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

well, actually the female eats the male...so the males don't get much chance to eat...:)))
ye.. read more
kentuck14

1 Month Ago

Oh . . . same old story!!!!
jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

exactly, my poetic friend...same old story...
at least we know what is coming.
j.
Usually, takes an impetuous beginning to bring about an "impetuous end."
Starkly vivid and most creative imagery.
Almost a Zen koan

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your words, Jimmy,
j.
Impetuous can be lovely... unless
you trust Spiders.... truly, Pat

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

good point, Pat....good point...:))))
Death by impetuousness…

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you,
j.
Nice brevity J, reminds me of a praying mantis having a beer with the caption " Might as well have another one, she's going to bite my head off anyway when I get home".

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

oh, that "Blank"---and she probably will.
j.
do we ever 'pay attention' to dangers all around us, especially when it comes to 'love', impetuous or even thought out... nicely written and thought provoking haiku Jacob

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

i remember being impetuous...and it took too many lessons for me to learn to be careful...but geez, .. read more

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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