over the hills and through the dell

over the hills and through the dell

 

 

you settled in my in-box

and i couldn't delete you

or my feelings

 

i tried to save us

but there was a glitch

and our love became spam

then a virus

 

then my hard drive broke down

and i no longer felt romantically

inclined

 

but even the c-cleaner

was useless

couldn't clear the cache

couldn't save the drive

 

so i just walked away

toward a virtual reality

of one.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/17/19

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Sounds like you pulled the
plug on the glitch of a bad relationship
sorry if these are a bad pun on words
Lol... 😂

then my hard drive broke down

and i no longer felt romantically

inclined


Love the theme
here nice piece 👍

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the pun...thanks for your words, Benita,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Great metaphors Jacob like a modern day Romeo and Juliet. Clever as always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...i am quite partial to that play...
j.

[R.E. Ray]

Ha! Did you pull the plug and try again? So clever with all these IT references. You read like a millennial computer geek, J. Quite impressive and damn good poetry. Maybe you should buy Apple. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and you know what is the truth, R.E.?
I am nearly all-thumbs with computers...through hit and miss i have figured some things out...but almost always have to get help from one of our computer guys at school when i have major problems...i make it up as i go along.

thanks my friend,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

wonderful, though somewhat tragic love story...always liked the sequel...love means you're always saying sorry.
I don't recall having the same issues with pen and paper...those fragile airmail letters written on paper as flimsy that love that slowly disappeared.
I suppose the good thing was you could take that letter outside, strike a match and watch the words turn to ash and float away. More satisfying than hitting delete...but that's the world nowadays isn't it?

Metaphorically speaking this is the mother lode with its underlying sadness and conveyance of helplessness.

Well done j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ted...
airmail letters yes...my long distance relationship with a woman in Poland...flimsy paper, envelopes as well.
appreciate your visit, Ted,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW, GREAT metaphor here. As the modem turns.....the new soap opera, n'est pas? :) Sometimes that cache needs to be cleaned out permanently to make reality...virtual or otherwise....peaceful. I liked this one a lot, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your reply....thank you, Lydi.
j.

[redzone]

is this what they call 'modem love'??? those dell computers are always virus prone they don't have the best protection program and it leads to unwanted little processors... or in your case malware... don't you just hate when virtual becomes reality.... except when it comes to your poetry Jacob where reality and virtual gets mixed with metaphor and syntax and we become infected with art....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Curt...
damn that malware.
j.

[Cassie]

ohh okey, this is so tech and powerfully nailed

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cassie!
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I love that title Jacob. I wanted to say over the hills and far away, but over the hills and through the dell took me to the computer. Tells me a story of online romance. One that failed. This is so clever and your references to virus, spam, glitches, hard drive are so inventive. And that ending, a virtual reality of one left me with a feeling of emptiness and reminded me of what it's like to be on your own. I also got a strong feeling of frustration as every attempt was made to salvage the situation, but it still didn't work out. Sad. Life is sad. Fabulous work and filled with emotion.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i know you love zeppelin too...thank you for your very kind review,
j.