secret

 

secret

 

 

 

the ornery silence

exudes from unwritten words

a lack of spacing

huddled together in hushed harmony

 

the ones we never pen

and cannot imagine onto the page.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/17/19

Reviews

[Neville]

some of the very best exist only in our own heads and minds.. too precious or maybe too risky to share and so they remain as hushed secrets.. splendid sir and of course true....

N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Neville,
j.

[Stella Armour]

some secrets are too precious to share ♥

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh my, yes.....yes.......
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, the words that never quite squeeze through the cracks in our psyche....the ones we can feel and almost taste, but can't quite get out....they can haunt a poet. I think your words that make it out, though, are wonderful! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi.....you are kind...
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Huddled together in hushed harmony...
like a Nuthatch out on a limb with a broken wing that cannot fly into the sky...
but waits for his Mate to feed him...
a secret rendezvous. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such a poetic reply....thank you, Pat....
reminds me of "Blackbird" by the Beatles..."Take these broken wings and learn to fly...all your life, you were only waiting for this moment to arrive---blackbird fly!"
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... I was clustered away by a fanatic religion, so I never listened to the Beetles ... only a friend who had a Party had a Beetles dance once who was not our religion. I never heard Blackbird all these years.. but now I Googled the Song and understand your comparison. truly, Pat

[redzone]

actually Jacob, I believe those crammed together hushed words hide in some dark, shadowy corner of our minds and laugh at us... in whispers of course cause while they don't want us to know their secret(s) they do love the silence they want us to hear.... the silence is deafening.... thank goodness your pen doesn't have ears and always fines the ways to untangle those huddled up words onto the paper giving our happy eyes poems to read.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Curt,
j.

[Ken Simm.]

Soft and intimate writing about what we all do to create. Excellent piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so glad you could relate< Ken....
what you create is always so visual...stunning poetry..
read moreso glad you could relate< Ken....
what you create is always so visual...stunning poetry..
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I saw the unwritten words and they were huddled up close together. Positively cuddling they were. This little write is so intimate. Hushed harmony, shush keep it secret. That's where you took me Jacob. I love this. A wonderful piece of brevity which exudes much warmth.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris,
j.