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Changing to fit into the theme

Changing to fit into the theme

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


Changing to fit into the theme

 

 

 

i thought i was a metaphor, once

well, figuratively speaking

 

maybe because i always wanted to be something

i was not

 

i tried to stand for something

movements of the 60's

peace

the dove

the lamb

 

pasteurized beliefs

written into a separate identity

symbols personifying symbols

 

marches in secession

a word or two drifting from the establishment's essay

 

i thought i was a metaphor, once

literally, for just a moment

 

but that moment jumped out of its poem

i grew up and out of verse

 

now i am just a dangling preposition

surmising of

where i am at...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/5/19  

© 2020 jacob erin-cilberto


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There is great depth to this, but on a lighter level, my father once told me, that the first time he presented, my at the time, very hippie mother to my grandpa, he reacted as if she were some kind of alien.

Nothing has changed really, the cultural generation gap, a progress of sorts I suppose, still reigns supreme, and I expect it always will; and I can well imagine the time is not too distant, when I will be caught saying; 'In my day of course..." :))

Beccy.


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

oh my yes, back in the sixties we were looked at as aliens....your dad understands and has been ther.. read more
J,
I often wonder if all our sense of rebellion back in the 60's was an act, a role many tried to play and get rewarded by the approval of peers. I know I didn't want to die in some senseless war . . . but I never hated my parents for being older (and less hip) than I. I would certainly hate to discover someone had followed me around in my youth . . . filming me and now as an aging man get to see it on the screen!
Yes . . . the rebellious youth of the 60's might have been a metaphor. I might have been a metaphor for wanting to fit into the theme of the time. Interesting thoughts you solicit through this poem.
T

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

even more interesting thoughts you present in your response...I know for me and others, the rebellio.. read more
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It is far easier to be a sheep rather than the shepherd methinks (that is until they end up on a plate with vegetables and gravy)
Until we get to the "take me as I am or not at all" age, we are constantly trying to change to fit in, well I think so :)
Good morning Jacob, hope you are well.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

yes, that shepherd's pie...
I have reached that age, no more trying to fit in...as the turtle.. read more
This is very relevant to our societies today, Jacob.... in the 60s you would have had such a tidal wave of change and issues to feel strongly about and have the need to make your voice known in regards to them. Today, i just feel it is a very boring world. Full of fake news and wannabe crusaders ranting and raving for things that are truly of a minor importance. Its not surprising then that one would feel as if they have no real mission in life and have lost touch with who they are and what they stand for. Still, its better to be a metaphor of sorts than an aimless member of a pointless flock.

I appreciate this write for its honesty and way of looking at oneself in a changing world. A fine write.



Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

it is not the world i dreamed of in the sixties...but then i was always so much the idealist...
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With its sweeping coattails, a metaphor does seem much grander and more imposing than the much humbler preposition, especially one that was subjected to the indignity of being left dangling and seemingly out of place...

This poem is very relatable for me as far as trying to be something I am not goes. I've tried and almost always failed at that and also at fitting in. I have always found my efforts comic in that direction. I used to get despondent earlier but nowadays I feel its not such a bad thing...

Loved this read, Jacob.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

yes, maybe not fitting in does have its upside...it makes us unique...not one who follows the crowd,.. read more
DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

I'm delighted I could, my friend...Always a pleasure!
Brilliant Jacob. The penultimate line jumped out and grabbed me by the ears, growing up and out of verse sums up where my own self opinion is at the moment.
Just when i was thinking i was cool daddy-O, i realise that what i thought was my casual strut, is more like the old man shuffle.
Oh well, at least in my own head im still awesome 😀

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

you are such a good poet, Lorry...
and when i read you, i get inspired to start filling in my.. read more
Lorry

2 Weeks Ago

I try... or am i trying?
Thanks Jacob.
This was fun to read for me and very witty. How do you find yourself in a world gone mad?

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

it ain't easy, is it?
thank you, light and ashes,
j.
light and ashes

2 Weeks Ago

No Sir, it is not. You are welcome.
metaphors can be very powerful--so is our lives as poets.

sighs

very good work here!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, CLR9---
j.
As writers, I feel like part of what we do is constantly imagine other possible lives. Perhaps that is what initiates the impulse to write--the need to write the hypothetical out and move on to a new idea. What I like about this is the different facets of life it showcases. There are the private battles with self and also the more public ones where we seek to make something meaningful of our lives. Something we can be proud of, or hold out to the world as markers of our beliefs.

It's not always easy to know what to get behind or what will result from our forays into different areas. And, it seems even harder to commit to a long term course of action when so much of our lives is taken up with the geometry of survival.

I feel like your speaker here is battling with the what ifs and should haves while also assessing where his choices have taken him. He's done things that were important, but there's a sense of dissatisfaction that permeates his dialogue. Hindsight is a treacherous shallow to wade into, I suppose. There is no going back, so the futile surmising can easily lead to trouble moving forward.

I'm probably thinking too much about it. But, this is a poem that bears the thought. Great exploration, Jacob.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

I like what you said about the "geometry of survival" taking up so much of our lives...causes die wh.. read more

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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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