White Flag, Paradise Surrenders

White Flag, Paradise Surrenders

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

White Flag, Paradise Surrenders

 

 

 

inconsolable 

handkerchief love kills the heart

tears, no substitute

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/7/20

© 2020 jacob erin-cilberto


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Great title. White flag and surrender. Giving up on the dream of paradise. The towel has been thrown in and this is a truly sad write. Wonderful brevity.

Chris

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, Chris,
j.
This leaves me wondering if we put the handkerchief to our face to hide behind, which in turn brings our arms up to our chest, in a vain attempt to protect an already fracturing heart.
It also made me realise what a wonderful and underused word inconsolable is. Its never going to be mistaken for cheery, is it? It even sounds a bit depressed.
Yet again, impressive how much you fit into such a confined space Jacob.


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind and understanding review, Lorry.
j.
An overdose of melancholia can be a killer too. Tears can feel so useless and in the way, at times.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

yes, so true....I am happy this makes some sense to the reader...wasn't sure if it would...
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DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

I personally hate too much of that thing, Jacob, so it made perfect sense to me.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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