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A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

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little children play

with marvelous guns

plastic enormity

soft rubber bullets

 

glance off skin

a slight tinge of pain

 

older guns

older children

with marvelous guns

despite late youth

different bullets

 

penetrate heart

it dies,

while they cling

to some fatally wounded version of life.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/2/2020

© 2020 jacob erin-cilberto


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What i take from your poem,is, whats more dangerous a thought or a gun,
and thoughts don't just pop into existence from no where.

Regards,Phill.



Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

yeah, i like that...thoughts can be dangerous for sure.
thank you, Phill,
j.
So sad to say that you are absolutely right. The use of arms is prevalent around the world, ironically, to maintain peace. Your poem made me wonder about the road ahead.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words, Fairy...
j.
Real bullets, real guns, better words...

Its scary that people don't really grow up...they just get better and more sophisticated toys of all kinds to fool around with and destroy one another for the fun of it...

Ironical that those toys would perhaps be less dangerous in the hands of little children...

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

yes, they pretend...the older ones have bad intent.
thank you for your insights, DIVYA,
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How true your words are jacob.. every which way true, and so sadly so.

N.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, Neville...good to see you back again...you are too scarce lately...
j.
Neville

1 Week Ago

Thanking you kindly my friend.. it is good to pop in for a while but am under strict instructions to.. read more
J., sadly this is a reality in many American communities, mostly in the most impoverished and violent neighborhoods. I've seen this tragedy as not a "gun" problem but a result of desensitization by violence in games and media. We've made it ok to kill whatever and whenever in the comforts of home. Those who kill are usually wounded early in life by some trauma, and when allowed to exact some trauma through gaming and other means, it seems killing is the next step. This poem is a punch in the gut, and speaks to a problem not easily solved.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your insightful words, R.E.
j.
The thing with guns is that,
"They have the guns, we have the poets. Therefore, we will win.”

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

i like that...yes, we have the poets..thank you, Ayesha..
j.
A powerful image, strong and straight forward.
We seem to have a generation of people who don't value themselves and therefore can not value life.
Those destroyers of life, stealer's of innocence wheel hate as their weapon of choice. A weapon that searches for opportunities.


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


It is a sad reflection on life, that innocent play as children can and does become something entirely different in later years. Even if they don't have the plastic, they will still aim with two fingers on their hand. I hate guns, but I have to say I am pleased that our specialist police force has them. When faced with a terrorist about to inflict carnage on the innocents, I am thankful for them them. A very profound write Jacob. Guns may not be readily available over here, but they can be replaced so easily by knives, and that is a huge problem too.

Chris

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

i really like your insights and what you shared here, Chris...thank you for your words,
j.
such a profound message, one is taught from an early age that guns are for play to learn and then to be used for pain to inflict fatal injury. never like guns.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

i hear you, andrew....mostly hate when they are used for the wrong reasons...and people are hurt.read more
What a profound and well written commentary of our culture. It is sad to me. ~Sharon

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind words, Sharon,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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