a Trillion Diameters

a Trillion Diameters

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


a Trillion Diameters 

 

 

 

i need freedom from the sanctuary

to break into the wide open

kiss clouds with bated tongue

 

exact breath from the leaning grass

put the rain in my back pocket

and graze in sordid splendor

 

with all i haven't got

and nothing that i want.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/9/2020

© 2020 jacob erin-cilberto


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Freedom from the sanctuary, a desire to break out. This reminds me of how I feel in the winter couped up inside, when I long for spring and the fresh air. Being at one with nature. You don't need money for that. Sun beams on the face, a breeze in the hair, sea salt on the lips, the scent of
honeysuckle on a balmy summer evening. I could write a book. Out of home and into the open. That's when I appreciate my garden most and when the river beckons.

Chris


Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

I could see that someday, Chris...you writing a book, maybe about gardening, but more than that...ab.. read more
Put the rain in my back pocket
oh I like that..just let loose
and go with the flow ..the last two
lines .clever. nothing else
matters.when you're feeling free.

.good stuff

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words, Fran,
j.
"Rebel Music" plays in your poem J. Yours is an anthem to breaking free into the wide-open spaces and tasting the heavens on your tongue. The wondrous metaphor and the greenest of imagery just delight! Bob Marley and I approve totally!

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thanks to both of you....appreciate your kind words...
j.
This read like one didn't want to be tied down by restraints society puts on us and or relationships. I suppose when one is at peace with oneself one enjoys one's own company.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

i imagine so, andrew,
thank you for your words,
j.
This is a beautiful writing, Jacob.
I felt a need for freedom in this piece, the need to go wild and free without limitations.
A life without worry.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you, Kay.... appreciate your words,
j.
An interesting dance through the dichotomy of being human. At least it speaks to me of the dueling wishes and emotions we can carry in us. Needing shelter but desiring freedom, wanting to approach experience with abandon but holding back, trying to hold on to things that have no solidity.

Your last two lines are like a great conundrum that keeps running back over itself looking for a place to settle. Like the title itself, it conjures an image of overflow or emotional chaos in my head.

Can a single circle have a trillion diameters or are we looking at a trillion circles. Either way there is a great influx of energy and a sense of not knowing what to do with it.

A really cool poem, Jacob. I like the way it triggers thought.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your very kind review, Eilis.
j.
(i need freedom from the sanctuary) An interesting "hook" and opening phrase here Jacob. One usually seeks sanctuary yet you seek "freedom" from its confines. I like that premise! ~Sharon

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words, Sharon,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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