you bend my alliterative current

you bend my alliterative current

 

allocate what you may

of your already persevered heart

a drop of love's blood

will stir mine

to incessant stream

syllables in red,

marching side by side

with summer's systemic

tide.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/26/2020

Reviews

[T.S. Ulmus]

You managed to really paint with words on this one, sound and meaning entwine. You clearly have a broad pallet to choose from in both words and thought.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, T.S.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Bent but not broken, shaken but not stirred. That last bit was Bond I think. Alexander Pope said hope springs eternal in the human breast. I don't see why it mayn't summer there as well. This has faint pastels of regret mixed with the charcoal determination of the artist. Perhaps a few bright splashes of remembrance are painting the syllables red. Here's hoping the heart's well of love and the ink of your pen never run dry for you. Great writing. F.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yep, Bond, James Bond...
thank you for your kind review, Fabian,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

title is killer .. intellectually/poetically intriguing for me...sheesh sir! a last drop of blood ...is that too much to ask? ...from a heart so drawn and dried? ... fuel for inspired issuance .. insisting a certain ilk of boredom perhaps :))))))))))))))))))))))))) ahahahaha! i love this! i've been away a few days ... what a welcome your poem is ... we all have our take on things eh!? i think this has taken top spot on my list of favorites by you, jacob .. as always...thanks for sharing your stuff!
E.
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Wow, thank you for those kind words, E.
You are so encouraging with your reviews for other poets...and we appreciate you.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

so much good stuff to find around here ;) you are welcome .. and thank you .. i especially like this poem of yours jacob! keep staying healthy! :)

[Christine Anne Shaw]

You aren't asking much are you? One drop of blood to get that stream of sentimen flowing again. One drop of blood. Maybe there is a meanness on the others part. What's one drop of blood between friends. I'm sort of thinking, if you can't give more than one incy drop of blood, don't bother. Not sure I fully got the picture here Jacob, but that's where I went. Somethings are best left.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Just one drop...one drop...
thank you, Chris,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I can tell you were a school teacher dear Jacob. The use of the language twisted into perfect places and thoughts. I had to read again. I love the use of the language. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

still am, Coyote, don't know if i could ever give it up...i will teach until i drop.
thank you for your kind words,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend. Good to be a teacher.

[Robert Trakofler]

On one hand I feel like this was a good thing, and on the other, it feels like a breakage of bastion. One could argue that the bastion was a band aid, and another could say the bastion was, well... a bastion! now what b*****d broke your bastion or was it best broken and bended

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, bunny...not sure i know the answer specifically for that question.
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and as Steven Wright has often said..."On the other hand, I have different fingers"

[Robert Trakofler]

and they are all alternatingly lovely

[Cory Barrett]

All it takes is droplet on memory to break our dams of sentiment. Good writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cory...
j.