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Thank You

Thank You

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Thank You

 

 

i wrote from the heart,

but you gutted my poem

gaffed the insides of my words

left the entrails hanging

from broken stanzas

 

I wrote from the gut

but you heartlessly 

broke my poem into pieces

and ate it like some bland leftover

you just wanted to remove from your fridge

 

i am pieces now

and still feel the freeze

from being locked inside

the compartment meant for 

scraps,

to feed the poemless

 

witless strangers

who have so little self-respect

they actually read me.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/28/2020

© 2020 jacob erin-cilberto


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From either heart or gut, leaves you open to the vicious barbs of misunderstanding deepening the wounds already made, that replaces balm with vinegar and add to the pain like a child frying ants with a magnifying glass.
The magnifying glass being the hint that they are looking for the flaes to cause the most suffering.
It brings to mind an old Scottish saying that my Gran used to say... If you can't say anything nice, expect a slap on the face.
I think she made that saying up though. She would never have hurt a fly.
I may be biased as to the last verses meaning, but it rings loudly of all that negative effort of trolls, looking to reopen old wounds.
If only social media had a troll eraser, like Tippex liquid paper, to white out all those bothersome blemishes of trolls, I think this whole worldy widey web thing might actually catch on 😀

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

your Gran had a really good sense of humor...which is needed to get through this life...
let'.. read more
Your poems wear a coat of many colours, Jacob, which can have a kaleidoscope of meanings. So take heart, those "meaningless scraps" will always provide continuous food for thought.
N.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words, Norman,
j.
"FEED THE POEMLESS"

I believe we have found a writer's cause. Although it is difficult to conceive of anyone arrogant enough to think they not only have the right to "help" rewrite a poem, but that they have the ability to do so.

Write on brother ... screw'um if they can't take a joke.


Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

ha ha ha...thanks, Ted!

j.
Some people hate what they don't understand; hate is a defensive mechanism to fill their gap. I hope they get well soon. Someone like you shouldn't be writing this.. nobody should be writing this. You're a creative poet, and I enjoy reading your work.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words, Lale.
j.

we know it happens, but we keep on doing it, dont we.. and some of us, maybe always will..

I bet you only very rarely on completion of something published or posted (same thing I guess, these days) sit back and think yeah.. this is something a bit special (please note, I chose my words carefully back there j.. just in case there are nippers around) .. I know I very rarely do, in fact, I think I never have... that's why we have a love hate relationship with feedback.. maybe..

Whatever the case sir.. you have certainly earnt my respect.

N.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind review, Neville....and yes, we keep on doing it, especially if we have done .. read more
Neville

1 Week Ago


I think some reviewers believe it to be a rite of passage.. but then some are nowt or little.. read more
hahaha this is so hilarious at the end, you have a way of making a negative thing end positively

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you, Cassie...have to laugh at life or we would go crazy...have to see the humor.
i app.. read more
This is what it feels like to have your work rubbished. There is a great deal of difference between positive, constructive feedback and someone ripping your work apart, knocking your confidence. I know, because years ago this happened to me and almost stopped me writing. Took me back a while Jacob. So well penned and that feeling you have summed up perfectly.

Chris

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

Appreciate your understanding, Chris...
yes, it happens.
j.
a poem to a poet is like a fine meal to a chef
we take such care only to often have it consumed but unappreciated
at least not appreciated by those we would like
(this is how this poem feels to me)

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

I especially like what you said in your third line, Ana...
thanks so much...
j.
Dam, so subtle yet intense, and interesting, so emotional and artfully conveyed only as a poet can. Luv it!

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words, Lost,
j.
I can connect to it on so may levels. Like I said, you pulled the feelings out that I was screaming inside. The emotions are vivid with a little touch of sarcastic tone at the end.
Poetry is something to feel and visualize, but when someone attacks and insults it, the feeling is terrible. I wish all the people had a softer heart and involved themselves more in helping everyone grow without insulting them.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your words, moog-drika...
for the most part, poets only have each other.
.. read more
moog-drika

1 Week Ago

Yes, I am looking at the positive side now.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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