a galaxy of drought

a galaxy of drought

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

a galaxy of drought

 

 

Blazing stone

the coldest heart on fire

rambling through the mire

of alone

 

rock hard cinema

movie reel really sizzling

through icy configuration

blue intonation

 

then she quits the picture

leaving the set with impunity

dangerous confessions

aloof

 

she is now a widow of her talent

no one near

for fear

the spliced tape will be outed as fake

 

and her star will skip across a pond of mud

heart burning out with a tantamount thud

Blazing stone

she is, was, will never be

 

again.

 

 

erin-cilberto

© 2020 jacob erin-cilberto


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I am left with a feeling of sadness for the bright star who faded away, from being feted as an image rather than a person and how the feeling of being lost in a sea of faces as they clamour for a piece led to her true downfall of never being seen as a person.
The Garbot line "I want to be alone" resonates in me thriugh this one Jacob.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

Images do fade, real substance does not...thank you, Lorry,
j.
First thing, this is unparalleled writing. Every word hits harder than the last. It offers the reader a chance to drift into thought or take part in the now. I read it three times, went three different ways with it. T hat dear sir is good writing.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind review, David...
j.
Blazing stone. I thought of pedestals. If we set women up as icons on a pedestal, they are bound to fall. If our expectations are too high, we will end up by being disappointed. I started to think of talented women who have taken a bit of a dive. The first two that came to mind were Lana Turner and Hilary Clinton. Both talented women but by their weaknesses exposed themselves to a fall from grace. Lana with her drinking, Hilary for putting up with Bill and the humiliation he heaped on her. She should have walked. There are so many more, particularly singers. I am thinking Whitney and Amy here. People are best left off pedestals methinks. A great write Jacob. Back with two fabulous new poems.

Chris

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

I really appreciate your review, Chris...yes those put on a pedestal are bound to fall..
j.
What a wonderful poem. A description of someone who lives in your heart and the days and moments she has lived. Remakable.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your words, Ken,
j.
some people do burn hotter than others and they do have a sheen that is a bit more bright:) but with that extra burn and brightness comes a quicker exhaustion:( and the contrast of those poles is all the more vivid

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

yes that contrast is that....thank you, brother bunny.
j.
A fall from from grace perhaps? Like discovering our idols were not what they appeared. I prefer the illusion, we need that sometimes.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

and as Frank O'Hara in his poetry often pleaded..."Lana Turner has collapsed, Lana please get up"read more
And yet, dear sir, you've created true poetry, ' ... her star will skip across a pond of mud .. heart burning out with a tantamount thud .. Blazing stone .. she is, was, will never be .. again. '

Even in her tragic fall, she has enough to be written about. So many people take centre stage or such.. and yet its the ones that mince and muck that linger on...until history discovers their flawed hypocrisy. Strange world.. but not for you, j., you always make magic with your pen.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

maybe i am the hypocrite...good god i think so sometimes.
you are so insightful dear, em.
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emmajoy

2 Weeks Ago

will return to read another post later, trying desperately to catch up..
Like a once brightly burning supernova, when the fuel expires an ominous black-hole develops, the only remnants of what once was ...

Very impressive metaphor Jacob

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, Tom, appreciate your kind words.
j.
This is a sobering poem with intriguing and effective imagery, such as “her star skipping across a pond of mud” is intriguing and effective.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind review, Victor,
j.
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There are so many interesting phrases in here! My favorites were "galaxy of drought" and "rambling through the mire of alone". Very emotive.

There's a tempting hint of story that leaves me wishing I could hear more...

Thanks for the words!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

I appreciate your kind words, CC,
j.

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Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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