Metamorphosis

Metamorphosis  

 

 

 

peaceful

in her garden,

she grows comfort

 

i pick greens 

of her kindness

her demeanor blossoms

 

in fall,

in winter

she stands tall

 

emitting a certain warmth

that ripens

with an early October breeze

 

i love the fruits

of her intensity

no storm can eradicate

 

she is beauty

she is a dozen roses

in one

 

opening to the song of the wind

i am a cloud

moved to a standstill

 

as i rain within her

smile

and become a clear sky.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/24/2020

Reviews

[ice_cubes]

it's a work of art . Love the imagery used

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, ice cubes...

[Beano]

This is fine poetry Jacob. Great metaphors and images, masterfully spun! x

Best, Jamie.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jamie,
j.

[Ruth]

Such beauty radiates from this piece, a gentle pause in serenity is how this makes me feel :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ruth.

[emmajoy]

How could a landscape designer, (presently a happy jobbing gardener) not find beauty in this extraordinary poem, j ! A mind positively blossoms and sighs long and loud reading your words. Especially those in the last three lines.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, em,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Yes life, its all about change and growing and more change just like the seasons. lovely poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, it is, thank you, andrew.
j.

[Fairy Khan]

This is wonderful poetry, Jacob. So pleasant to read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fairy,
j.

[redzone]

this is wonderfully rich poetry Jacob.... and when in love, clear skies abound.... reminds me of the song by
Johnny Nash, "I Can See Clearly Now".... "gonna be a bright sun shinny day..." and in todays climate, man we could use some "sunny days"... you have written a really nice poem here Jacob, thanks for the sunshine!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, we surely could...and that is a great song...have you heard or seen the video of Grace Vanderwaal's version of it? It is really good....
thank you, Curt.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZcCp7488puc

[redzone]

I am listening to it now, thanks for the link and yes, it really is good...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

from the time I saw her on AGT when she was twelve in 2016, I have been a fan of her voice, unique style...and song writing..even though this song is one she made her own version of with some tweaking, her own songs show such a talent for writing about everyday things...so wonderfully. I have her first two CD's...it is worth your time to look at a couple of her other videos if you get a chance and are so inclined.
Glad you like this version.

[X]

Written with subtlety of fine embordered lace--delicate and so silky! A fine write Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Kira,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Yes, when you are with the right person it can cause changes within you, and if things are really right, the benefit is mutual. Loved the floral metaphors in this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.

[Fran Marie]

wow; now this is
true poetry, bringing
the reader into
a tender realm of
Autumn s beauty
with an early
October breeze..
nice work

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Fran,
j.