11:58 p.m.

11:58 p.m.

 

 

i am almost midnight

how is your moon?

quarter heart

the light in your eyes

is dimming,

there is an eclipse of lies

 

thank you for the night shade

i never want to see my heart again

 

i reach for you in the darkness

touch nothing

excuses abound

she's close, i almost love her

i am almost midnight

you lie in your quarter moon

 

i am the black truth

you trip over in the dark

 

a brutish litany ensues

i never want to see my heart again.

 

i am almost midnight.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/3/2020

Reviews

[Lorry]

Almost at the darkest point of being, in ever fading gloom, reaching out to what was once there but confusingly is no more...
With light in eyes dimming, I am seeing the Trumpenator's red eye sparkle and fade into death, still staring in the blackness (like you know there's gonna be a sequel)
His blackest truth will I assume, end this slapstick with falling into a hastily arranged shark enclosure in the oval office... Or perhaps his sunbed will transport him through time to the time of the other dinosaurs and they can all stare at that ever brightening light zooming its way towards their extinction.
Hmm, I think current news topics may have swayed my thoughts on this one Jacob 😀

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, Lorry,
j.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

I don't know how much i comprehended right , but it felt like this beautiful pain in my heart as i read the words . "I am almost midnight ". The emotions you have penned , the way you have put life and pain in every word , it does magic . I just want to keep reading it . Hope i write something like this one day , sir :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Ankita,
j.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

I mean it, sir and you,'re welcome. Please keep safe and take care :)

[T.S. Ulmus]

It took several reads, but is this a poem about the Doomsday clock? It is filled with celestial and lunar imagery which are our natural clocks. Even if I'm wrong, the poem contains a certain nihilism that I appreciate.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, T.S., I appreciate your slant on the piece. And for those read poetry, never a "wrong" but whatever that particular reader deems from the poem.
thank you for the read and your words,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

I love how you use the moon as if it were animate; the moon is your love but only a quarter full; not complete; eclipsed by lies; lies VS. truth; darkness is truth; .. I love the nightshade; then time runs out at midnight as the eclipse is final and it will be black; you will never see your heart again. Such great metaphors, and how cleverly you use them. well done!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Had to read it several times, pretty complex...did I get any of it?

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

Beautiful, pushing away midnight or holding midnight as a crutch?
I found this quite intriguing as well, so nicely done Jacob...
I loved this

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ang, I appreciate your words,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Powerfully beautiful
Loved this
Total eclipse of the heart
Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Julie,
j.

[John the Baptist]

That the addressee is called "quarter heart" seems to say a dearth of emotional commitment. Other parts of the poem indicate the speaker has tried to find response but is now frustrated. Two minutes to midnight means time is running out fast, and the speaker feels betrayed and let down. He may not get involved with anyone again. Love can be a real b***h.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, John,
j.

[VelvetPotato]

This makes me feel a bit empty. I feel as if it is a love that is fading out. The darkness and "dimming eyes" representing the untruths and inconsistencies throughout the relationship, but also the "death" of the relationship. I feel like you were playing on the idiom "half-hearted" by taking it a step further, "quarter heart/quarter moon." Excellent and thoughtful write as always. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding review, Velvet.

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Sounds like pumpkin time for your carriage.
Intense.
Someone seems to have run off with your heart--don't search,
It's probably badly broken.
Great stuff!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jimmy,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Love can cause pain. It can cause darkness, but despite that most of us want to seek it out again. Most of us need to feel loved. That's where these lines took me Jacob. There was alot of turmoil here. I felt that deeply.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your review, Chris.
j.