yer betteren me

yer betteren me

i like reading yer pottery

you are creativer than i yam

i wished my mind werked like that

my thoughts unravel like poured gravel

dumped on a road of confusion

but at least my spilling 

and grandeur 

is improving

but

i still like reading yer pottery

it's always a bowl 

shaped of good werds.

erin-cilberto

11/21/2020

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

hardtoreedandnotlaughoutloudlylikealoon. kindaremindsmeofjabberwockyandpomesofthetilk. maybeyouwerelistenintoLennon'sYerBlueswhenyourotethis.

thanksforthelaugh...needitthisam.

sorryfertheconfuscation to borrowfromourScottishfriend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"well i'm lonely, want to die, if i ain't dead already, girl you know the reason why"
thank you for your fun response, Ted.
j.

[barleygirl]

Pottery & bowl of words . . . brilliant! Your poem challenges us all NOT to make thoughtless judgemental remarks about whatever "level" we think someone is writing at . . . whatever one thinks about the AGE of a writer (yesterday a young friend's poem disregarded becuz her point of view reflects her age) . . . lets just meet people where they are, so they feel inspired to do better, not shamed for doing badly . . . our cafe community is about what people have to say, not judging their skill in writing it (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absofriggenlutely ...

thank you for that, Margie.
and where did you get that picture of me and my first girlfriend when we were seven?
j.

[Cassie]

This werds are diffucot to andstan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ime apollo gizin' fer that...

[Lorry]

Yer wordificatin' just be like the differunce between a top affletical at de high jump or poll voting Jaycub. You Cleer at the furst attemp, while the rest of uz wounder why you don't limbo under it like the rest of uz 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I would break the pole at the high jump, but thanks Lorry....
"jack be nimble jack be quick, jack go underneath the stick---how low can you go?"
I can go pretty low, I appreciate that you commented on this one.

[h d e rushin]

I drove my mother to Walmart this morning and between the bucket seats was some of my "new" poems. She read one and made a whimsical face. Sometimes fanciful faces mean something fantastic has happened. Sometimes it doesn't......dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is too funny....my mom read one of my books many years back...and when she was done, she set it down and looked at me and said "this is awful, I didn't understand a word"--
Sorry Mom.
thank you for this response, dana,
j.

[John the Baptist]

I yam? Is this Popeye the sailor speaking? I think I'm going to start using "yer" (John Wayne version of you are). Apostrophes bug the hell out of me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I dont like them either, and wouldnt use them except
I havent found a way around it.
thanks John, and where did my Olive Oil go?
oh, on my pizza.

[Patricia Wedel]

I like reading yer pottery... is my favorite line.
You are like a Fur Coat in Winter... full of feathers... lol. gently, Pat x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pat.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Can’t quite help this is Trump thinking of Biden, he knows he is better. As for the poem itself you never cease to amaze me with your widescreen scope of writing styles delivering a very clever humorous piece and the spelling mistakes emphasised the comparison of intellectual differences involved.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting. Hadn't thought of that, but could be, could definitely be.
thank you, andrew,read moreinteresting. Hadn't thought of that, but could be, could definitely be.
thank you, andrew,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Emily Dickinson?

[andrew mitchell]

Read more? Is this a cryptic clue?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no, that stupid "read more" often posts, but not so we can press on it...
Emily is an interesting guess...but it's no particular person, really.

[Chris Shaw]

So different from you Jacob. Your muse was having much fun with this one. I can see you laughing as you typed this one out :)

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh my yes, I did have a good time with this one, thank you, Chris,
j.

[Patricia]

This is so cool and something completely unexpected, you are always full of surprises j. The last stanza is awesome, I’m smiling!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Pat,
j.