So

So

 

 

i have a backlog of tangible words

to describe the intangibles of love

 

reset, typeset

upset streams

of vociferous endings endearing 

themselves to the beginning, middle 

and end of us

 

shorn legacies

of love letters torn 

in angry, jagged rage

 

dented keyboard

the innocent victim

i hate love on the morning after

 

a desk of spilled coffee

and spilled adversarial verse

 

i scream at you to a bleeding sun

and it hurts my eyes.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/7/2021

Reviews

[lightsong]

That's You Mr. Jacob, in each line here your spirit is dancing, your heart is inking... and that's why this poem is very special, and the reader will be touched in a personal way, the "war of words" emotional, touching and wonderful verses.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate your kind words, lightsong.
j.

[John the Baptist]

Most of the words don't sound like happy ones. How is it that this thing everyone wants causes so much misery?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hard telling, John,
thank you for your visit and words,
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When we hold emotions in we create a volcano that could hurt inocent bystandards stopping by to look.
I feel you on this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is absolutely true...a volcano.
thank you, Cowboy,
j.

[Christine Anne Shaw]

Better out than in, I say. Healthier to release those emotions, rather than let them build up to a volcanic eruption. There's alot of upset here though, even if it hasn't topped the scale at a mighty ten. I prefer a quiet sunrise. This one a tad too noisy for me. Painful to be a fly on the wall.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I prefer that same kind of sunrise...thank you, Chris,
j.

[duff]

Emotions crashing on a monitor like television. Watching your hurt.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ooo, i like that, duff...yes, indeed.
thank you,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Sounds like you are having a temper tantrum here; but so be it; you're releasing your emotions which is a good thing to do always. These don't last very long and then...the bleeding sun will ultimately warm your heart, even though it hurts your eyes. Nice slice of life poem, or I should say slice of a minute or two.....
Best, Betty

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Betty....
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re quite welcome J.

[roarke]

If anyone has ever been here, felt this, realized the air gap of breath...they’ll know know how your title “So” puts a period on the moment. Stellar piece JEC.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding review,roarke,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

But the sun will nod knowingly and comfort you with warmth. The keyboard does help when we need to get our emotions out. Love letters torn....do people still write on paper with pen? Something to ponder on this rainy morning! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I do sometimes...like when I am at the shop waiting on my car to get fixed...I always bring something to write on, then transfer whatever it is with the keyboard later...I used to write poems on napkins when I was cooking pizzas in the middle of a rush on Friday nights at Pags....i would write a line or two, pull some pizzas, then write another line or two...that was always fun, and risky for the pizzas...ha ha
thanks Lydi for you understanding review,
j.

[Neville]

......... you may never know just how gratifying it is to have found this page and suddenly experience the relief of realising, I'm not the only one in this boat after all .. thanks jacob, its good to be back.

N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for getting me, Neville,
j.

[Hebe]

Excellent... the anger comes through.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Hebe,
j.