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Oh, the words can look pretty

and stylish

and run together in bonified ballet

 

the iambic feet pointing

lifting

archaic rhymes bow to the band

 

the old drummer

drums to the beat

of those iambic feet

 

but if the meaning

is just another show

for a poet who dances 

 

in drab spotlight

simply motion

with routine thoughts

 

binding the spirit

into ennui

the audience just turns the page.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/9/2021

© 2021 jacob erin-cilberto


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I've been here so long and have written so many flops in the last couple of years. I wind up taking them down because no one is interested and I know they'll collect dust. I can feel it within hours that it was wrong to post. I've run out of ideas and my titles aren't great. But yet, I'm still trying. If there was a formula I'd learn it. But with me, It's hit and miss.

Good poem, J.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Mostly hit, I would say, my friend.
j.
Ralph Proenza (Docralph)

4 Weeks Ago

Relic, If it comes from your heart & pen, then it's a success. Even the Post-A-Note was a failed ex.. read more
 Relic

4 Weeks Ago

Thanks very much. :)



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I've been here so long and have written so many flops in the last couple of years. I wind up taking them down because no one is interested and I know they'll collect dust. I can feel it within hours that it was wrong to post. I've run out of ideas and my titles aren't great. But yet, I'm still trying. If there was a formula I'd learn it. But with me, It's hit and miss.

Good poem, J.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Mostly hit, I would say, my friend.
j.
Ralph Proenza (Docralph)

4 Weeks Ago

Relic, If it comes from your heart & pen, then it's a success. Even the Post-A-Note was a failed ex.. read more
 Relic

4 Weeks Ago

Thanks very much. :)
This poem perfectly represents every poets goals which is to publish a work that (hopefully) everyone would read. I experienced this issue but I discovered that what is more important is if you are content with your writing. Very nice poem with an array of interesting techniques.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Yes, if we are comfortable in our own writing shoes...that is key.
thank you, Lavi,
j.
dearest Jacob... even Shakespeare spoke of
iambic meter of Ballet... your mind never stops
expressing the delicacies of Art and the Beauty of
Ballet and Poetry. A "really really good Show" as
Ed Sullivan would say. tenderly, Pat

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thanks for the kind words and the smile...
we watched Ed every Sunday night...and those Waltz.. read more
Patricia Wedel

1 Month Ago

Yes.... we go back a ways ...
remembering when Elvis Presley was on the Ed Sullivan Show.. .. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Gosh yes, I saw that when it was aired the first time and wondered where his other half was...
.. read more
I couldn’t help feel seeing a poet on stage reciting and the audience chairs were empty. Hopefully this site is going through a phase, I hope it keeps going, all my works 5230 of them are on here and I haven’t moved them to a folder yet.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

I would definitely move them....Mine come from a folder to this place....have to be safe with our wo.. read more
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Gee
Many a time I'm lost at the title :)
Seems as though this place is on the wane, or the quality at least. I don't pop in as often but when I do it's good to see the familiar faces, stalwarts, that make it worthwhile coming through the door.
Hope you are keeping wel! Jacob

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Those that rule the roost need to be a bit more heavy handed with those that only visit to irk, anno.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

I am afraid you are correct, Gee.
jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

and I do appreciate your kind words on my work.
j.
Just like hey say dance why no one is looking or talk like no one is listening we poets must write like no one is reading.

The paper is a dance floor so let the pen dance.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

and often, no one is.
thank you, Cowboy.
j.
Hello, Jacob! :)
You're not a big fan of rhyme. Haha
I've read a lot of bizarre "poetry"; and as one who enjoys adding patterns to his writing, I object to you singling us out, haha, but I agree that ennui isn't the feeling I want from a reading.
All art is communication, but not all art speaks to us as the artist would have liked, and some artists are too pompous. Haha

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

and there is some damn good rhyme and some damn bad free verse as well.
but we do hope our wo.. read more
Well said, Jacob. You always paint a vivid picture to make your point, and it's spot on! I love it! Sadly, my work is often 'in sad spotlight' which is my why my secondary user name is "Verbosity".

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Hey, your work always has life, Ralph...but then we are our own worst critics.
thank you for .. read more
You are so right sir Jacob. Words have power, style, motion and dance and above all meaning that can life up the spirits or not, bind them together or not and and cause liveliness or boredom. You write with real meaning.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

I appreciate you, Sami...you are always so supportive...yes, Emily D. said "words have the power to .. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Month Ago

Wow! A double_edged sword indeed. You are welcome.
I loved the language used in the poetry.
"binding the spirit
into ennui
the audience just turns the page."
The above lines were my favorite. Thank you Jacob for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote



Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Coyote,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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