a title's too good for this poem

a title's too good for this poem

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

a title's too good for this poem

 

 

 

crept into the width of your heart

absorbed in the crevasses

of catastrophe, 

I was the underbelly of infectious

amorously endowed thoughts

 

trapped

your smile the fangs,

the jaws

of my truth

 

my heart's land mine

there are a few pieces

left from the detonation of my delirium 

 

the length of my exposure

PTSD the mind

I landed in

with a strange exhilaration

I could not contain.

 

erin-cilberto

7/19/21 

© 2021 jacob erin-cilberto


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We all have an image of what we like love to be and if not worn on the sleeve could blow up in your face like a two sided coin love or rejection.

Posted 4 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Days Ago

I am flipping it right now, thank you, andrew,
j.
How about "You Tore Out My Heart and Stomped That Sucker Flat?"

Posted 4 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Days Ago

ha ha, yes, good one, John,
j.
Very descriptive phrases, like: "my heart's landmine" and "detonation of my delicrium".

Posted 5 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Days Ago

Thank you, Shelley.
j.
I could feel the confining restriction of my chest as I read this. Every word tightening it further. You're absolutely correct, it is too good for a title. I love when I can read words and FEEL at the same time. Wonderfully written.

Posted 6 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

5 Days Ago

thank you for your kind review, She,
j.
The writing here is so extremely intricate and detailed. The words here are strong and could only be written by someone with a troubled heart. Intense, but whenever someone writes with these emotions it makes for one of the best poems.

Posted 6 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Days Ago

thank you for your very kind review, Colacat,.
j,
Those land mines are good for excavating the soul. I hear that even diamonds are made from coal. But, if we ferret out a ruby or two along the way, a sapphire here, an opal there, we might pay for the dig without having the entirety blow up in our face. It's always a pleasure to read your words, Jacob.

Posted 6 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Days Ago

thank you for your kind and understanding words, Fabian,
j.
A title's too good for this poem

Then you must consider it a disaster zone. A heart took some hit here J.
Post traumatic stress disorder and yet you had a strange exhilaration. Maybe you got that when the war was over. Sort of a sense of relief even though the damage was severe. A puzzler but powerful with it.

Chris

Posted 6 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Days Ago

I think I am a jigsaw puzzle with some pieces missing...thank you for the read and your words, siste.. read more
Bitten by love, severed by implosions, blasted by explosions, affected by war and drugs...Wow!
Powerful Jacob with deep sentiments.

Posted 6 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Days Ago

thank you so much, Sami,
j.
Sami Khalil

4 Days Ago

You are welcome sir Jacob...

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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