First Draft

First Draft

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

First Draft



a plea for passion

some words unsaid

fingers traverse skin

tapping out letters

love is written in waves

of synchronization

as bodies linger

single spaced


an essay in mime

a feeling acted out

symmetrical paragraphs of touch

theme blunted

conclusion blurred


as to what exactly occurred...






© 2021 jacob erin-cilberto

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We have a script on how we want things to go on a date or relationship but it’s all the other things which get in the way or alter the plans. Maybe it’s all about adapting and acting, take 1, lets do it again take 2 etc. one more time act 3 take 5. Excellent write.

Posted 1 Month Ago

jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Takes me about ten takes...ha ha...thank you, andrew.
Penning a poem, that first draft is somewhat like the first time you get intimate with someone special. You want it to be a big hit. You want it to be memorable. Maybe you don't want to think about a second or third draft, all your efforts are going into making a purrfect poem :) Now look where I have drifted J. Wonderful write.


Posted 1 Month Ago

jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Hank really liked your reply....and she thanks you...
Good god man…this is sooooo good. The waves of synchronization, damn that whole stanza is perfection. Love and literature, yeah, they are synergistic.

Posted 1 Month Ago

jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind words, Crowley,

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Added on August 3, 2021
Last Updated on August 3, 2021


jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL

Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..