Voices

Voices

 

 

write faster

said my thoughts

weep slower

said my eyes

poem yourself to sleep

said my better judgment

 

wake up with a new heart

said my wit

 

as I drifted off

to laugh

 

and they quieted.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/14/21

Reviews

[Patricia]

yep, that is how it is exactly, except you laugh, I pout :) so frustrating those sleepless nights, I feel one coming on now and no muse to amuse but the night ain't over. what a great little write j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Patricia.
Appreciate your words,
j.

[Patricia]

you're welcome j.

[shadrach hah]

Hi Jacob, another wonderful write from your pen, Yes, those voices can surely drive you mad, if you let them. They always seem to want to have the last word, but that word should always be ours. Another creative and skilful write from your golden pen. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Hugs....Mike.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mike,
j.

[shadrach hah]

You are welcome, Jacob. Have a wonderful Wednesday....Mike.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh man! how those voices can drive one insane ... trying to fall into slumberland .. poets weep and write .. inspirations flash and we scramble to get it all down ... sure of it's brilliance .. until the infamous "morning after" :)))))))))))))))) ... what a great idea "poem yourself to sleep" ..I typically "novel" me self and it usually doesn't take long ... my difficulty is not in falling to sleep but in staying asleep ... waking the "Voices" command my attention ... I usually just get up to "quiet" them ;) ...love your poem ...i feel a kinship in it.
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, "weep and write, write and weep, but never sleep!"
poetry often wakes me up...but I never mind that...feel very lucky to get to write.
thank you, E.
j.

[lessa (kenzie)]

Love this, makes me think of a person who has trouble falling asleep. Love the imagery in this write.
I enjoyed this

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Alex,
j.

[Ruth]

I think words own us writers more than we own the words and sometimes that can be intensely emotive, your poetry is stunningly visual as it is written, beautiful :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't own them, never have professed to, just a conduit who grabs them from somewhere and nowhere and writes them down.
thank you, Ruth,
j.

[Weeping willow]

Love this one as at times when you go to write your words from voices deep, they slip away from you, leaving in a peril ;-]. Nice one

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Hate it when they slip away, don't you?
Oh crap, there goes that poem.
thank you, willow.
j.

[Mohammed Musa Ibrahim]

This is great piece. Short and precise.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Eric, for your kind words.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

I love this piece and your use of the word, so imaginative! Tell those voices to run….
Your poetry is perfect, and they are criticizing you… glad you could laugh it off at the end…..
Best, B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome J

[Ted Kniffen]

To die, to sleep—
To sleep—perchance to dream. Ay, there’s the rub!

As our friend Will stated ... and yet we embrace the little death each night and poems often rise unbidden in the darkness.

Sometimes our better judgement is found at our wit's end and laughter is truly the only medicine that cures.

Good one j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, Ted, it is exactly like you infer...It is a rub, I love when those poems rise.
but then I have to tell the King...where the
are...."They are at supper" "not where they eat, but where they are eaten, a certain congregation of worms is eating at them"
I think I will go to sleep...maybe my muse should.
thank you Ted...

[lightsong]

GOOD! that You ended this with a smile even if an irony because if not I was about to shed few tears! that's the life of a true poet, words, thoughts, feelings, haunt him everywhere and anywhere, expectedly and unexpectedly. great and clever one Mr. J!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, lightsong....makes me feel so good when you like my work.
j.

[lightsong]

Oh! we all LOVE your works Mr. J :> anytime*