Shiteful, Spiteful Rhymes back on the lam

Shiteful, Spiteful Rhymes back on the lam

 

 

I skipped out on my parole

grammar police

put me back in the clink

 

a plank bed

a sink

a drink of expletives

 

punctuation an orange suit

I just want to be left alone

my verbs are my business

 

the nouns from my old gang

are gunning for me,

my adjectives tired of making license plates

 

for poetic leeway

I am off the freeway

working in the prison library

 

indexing the classics

with very few articles

to pin them on.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/24/21

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Doesn't sound like you had a toilet in your cell. What'd you do with all the sh**? But then everything you write smells like roses. Right? I like the way you run the parts of speech through this one. Those old nouns could be narcs. Watch out!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, got caught by one or two...thank you, Bill...
I will call you for bail money...ha ha.read moreYes, got caught by one or two...thank you, Bill...
I will call you for bail money...ha ha.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Very very clever Jacob. Another gem from the master.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, andrew,
j.

[Miss Sharon]

(the nouns from my old gang are gunning for me, my adjectives tired of making license plates)
So clever Jacob! I love your style. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Sharon....
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I went to a Grammar School. Actually, they were sticklers for it. When writing letters or statements, I am very careful with it, but not with poetry, I tend not to punctuate. I let it breathe freely. The grammar police might be well intentioned, but I don:t want them putting anyone in the clink. This was a fun read Jacob. I am wondering what inspired it?

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am a big fan of letting poems breathe...punctuation can steer...lack of it leaves the reader to read as he or she will.
thank you, Chris,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... I really enjoyed Grammar in high school... diagramming sentences was so artistic and we students learned better in those days in the Fifties. So I really enjoy your Poetry... time after time. Writing is artistic and mystic. Be still my Heart ... You have set my Spirit free. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the nuns used to have me get up in front of the class and diagram sentences...I liked it, too...I can still do some of it...
but don't remember it all.
Poetry is our art, Pat...and we care deeply about it.
thank you,
j.

[Patricia]

Oh that was fun to read! You still surprise me with your writing after all these years! Very cool

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Patricia,
j.

[Patricia]

you're welcome j.

[MomzillaNC]

Very cute. I tend to be a bit of grammar stickler myself -- but never to the detriment of the meaning. And, poetic license is specifically for release from the grammar prison.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true...thank you, Momz.
j.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome

[Kerra]

This is too cute, I love this, so much to be said here enjoyed the read

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kerra,
j.