drafted into the chill

drafted into the chill

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

drafted into the chill
a cold wind 
is disrespectful of feelings
raw, bitter images
excruciate the swollen cheek
as tears freeze to the heart
and my steps towards you
become slower,
slower, slower
halted, my scarf
waves like a white flag
the fight in me
is an autumn leaf
that wants to soldier no more.
erin-cilberto
1/23/22

© 2022 jacob erin-cilberto


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I love this. probably because today I was conjuring a poem of along this thought path, I was picturing how. to say it without saying it, you have inspired me. I have been opting for the slow fade.

This cold you speak of, I must experience it at some point in my life.

Always nice to read your work.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jacob erin-cilberto

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words, KWP,
j.



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They always say, "Don't give up the fight" but sometimes the fight gives up in us. Delicate metaphor brilliantly crafted here. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind review, your reviews always encourage me, Fabian. And that horse in the pict.. read more
Fabian G. Franklin

3 Months Ago

Thank you. His name is Diesel; a good friend.
this is incredible...i absolutely adore this.
you weave unique vivid imagery that paints
a sense of subtle bittersweet memories.

thank you, for sharing ~ x


Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

thank you for your very kind words, barrie,
j.
Wow, love the images I got with this piece,
love the first stanza so much as well as the ending line,
kind of touching really, nicely expressed

Posted 4 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Months Ago

thank you so much beckie for your kind words and extended visit to my page.
j.
I feel here a relationship that has gone pear shaped over a period of time. I feel a withdrawal of once warm feelings, into a white flag situation. The effort has been too exhausting. Time to call it a day. I felt the chill here J. Excellent poem and the title is perfect.

Chris

Posted 4 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.
Great work ! i enjoyed reading this piece.
I hope to read more of your writing.

Posted 4 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words,
j.
cheyenne s garcia

4 Months Ago

you are welcome ! xoxo
I love this. probably because today I was conjuring a poem of along this thought path, I was picturing how. to say it without saying it, you have inspired me. I have been opting for the slow fade.

This cold you speak of, I must experience it at some point in my life.

Always nice to read your work.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jacob erin-cilberto

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words, KWP,
j.
Some hearts are warm, some are a deep freeze that puts a wind chill to shame, frozen still marching toward slower and slower like when the tin man gets wet, great visual btw. Autumn is over, all but a leaf in the wind when winter comes and chills you to the bone. Freezing just reading it. Ugh winter.

Posted 4 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your words, Corset.
j.
This poem is cold! - See what I did there? lol
Where I live many people come to get away from the cold, thought the cold never ruin their good old days tucked away in their minds. Cold has a purpose. Cuddling near a fireplace or bonfire would be unbearable if it wasn't cold. A lot of my romantic writes I think of thru the eye of the cold. But there is certainly a harsh side to it, indeed. Thank you for reminding me of that in this well-descriptive writing.

Posted 4 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Months Ago

thank you for your very kind review, Cyprian,
j.
Coldness from someone loved can be so cruel, brutal to the heart. sometimes we have nothing in our hands but to accept and surrender and this is not weakness, in fact this is one of the most hard things that only strong people can do (a soldier :>). your lines drips with tears and blood. another marvelously written of sore wounds and pains. Take care of yourself in that cold Mr. J :> (It's VERY cold here these days).

Posted 4 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Months Ago

thank you for your kind review, lightsong,
j.
Good morning Jacob,
Not sure which line with the wonderful use of metaphors I like best.. Perhaps tears freeze to the heart..or
my heart waves like a white flag. (wanting to surrender)
I am full of the images behind the images in every line..
Pain seems to fall behind each line..
Really wonderful..Lisa

Posted 4 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your very kind review, Lisa,
j.
Lisasview

4 Months Ago

You are always welcome.

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Carbondale, IL



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