it was a novel idea

it was a novel idea

 

 

the great white whale of hope

a society of Ahab’s

abandoning the hunt

 

Moby Dick is a ghost

of peace,

a mammal of persistence 

that quit swimming towards the sun

 

the ship of fools

capsized in friction

the crew mutinied

the captain left flummoxed

 

there are no waves of togetherness

hope harpooned

retaliates

the storm brews

in malignant light

 

then, just still waters

none of us are left aboard

a world if indifference

 

a silhouette

in moonlight

swims away

 

the prey becomes the hunter

call me silence.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/6/22

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

A well crafted piece
as always in wonderful
metaphor delivery..i so
liked the ending the hunter
becoming the prey....powerful
conclusion....nice work

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fran,
j.

[W.k.kortas]

Your ability to tightly construct extended metaphors remains a wondrous thing, and this is no exception. First-rate stuff.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, W.k.
j.

[Lisasview]

Well, Jacob I decided to read another of your poems tonight..yes, it is night time in Spain..and, once again I was on an adventure..line after line..
I have been busy finishing up my Sonnet..Hand-In-Hand ..Final version is finally submitted...So I just have not had anytime to review anyone..
Knowing I would enjoy reading what you wrote I decided to see what you submitted.... always enjoyable.
Lisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lisa,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

One of two great opening lines in literature ... Call me Ishmael (the second being "Marley was dead.)
I still have my copy of Moby Dick. The story itself was good, although the movie with Gregory Peck and Richard Baseheart was terrific. Funny though, I don't remember a re-make. Although The Caine Mutiny I suppose was based on the book to some extent.

Well done with this one j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh, that damn Scrooge.
thank you, Ted.
j.

[BlackRose]

Such a great tale. Holds much in a sea of turbulence till 'the prey becomes the hunter'

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like your line, BlackRose...maybe better than the poem itself.
.j.

[BlackRose]

Thank you, what an honor! 😊

[Lorry]

I heard tell that even the moon is embarrassed to reflect in that sea of indifference now Jacob. We are fast becoming marooned on our own islands of indifference, when once we made an effort of sorts to pull together in a semblance of the same direction.
I don't know how I managed to omit Moby from my "random amount of books to read before I die. I feel an edit coming on. 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

omit it...I say....I make reference to the story, but hated the book...such congested writing of such a great tale....the movie is better.
thanks, Lorry,
j.

[DIVYA]

The concluding lines are so haunting for the spirit. Nothing and no one left....Silence, it seems like the ultimate hunter, slayer. We will all be its prey at the end of every novel. Masterful and beautiful poetry as always, my friend. It's always wonderful reading you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, DIVYA,
appreciate your kind thoughts,
j

[John the Baptist]

If it weren't for Putin, Moby might still be with us. Vlad must have learned harpooning while he was in the KGB.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha ha....must have....
thanks for the smile, John...
j.

[AMMD]

Eloquent and enthralling take on a great tale - from title to finish

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, AMMD,
j.