My Utopia with one comma in it

My Utopia with one comma in it

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


My Utopia with one comma in it

 

 

 

i am mad at life

i am mad about life

i am mad at you

i am mad about you

 

i am mad at war

mad at violence

mad at the economy

mad at the current president

and the former president

and the one before that

and the one before that

 

i am mad at slums

i am mad at people with bad gums

who can't afford the teeth doctor

because they are madly poor

and mad at their lives

and mad because of their lives

 

i am mad at myself for being mad

and i am mad at you for not understanding

and i am mad at you for not trying to understand

and i am mad at me for being mad at the world

 

and mad at me for being mad at you

because i really just want to be happy

 

and hug life

and hug the president

and hug poverty, vivaciously

and hug a dollar bill 

as i say bye to it forever

 

and embrace madness

until i don't know why i am mad

anymore

and don't care if i'm mad 

anymore

 

do you understand?

because i don't

 

and i am mad about that, too.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/7/22

© 2022 jacob erin-cilberto


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Thank goodness for a comma, you can take breath now for it’s a mad,mad, mad world out there. We are living in a world driven by rage out of frustratIon that the world is far from perfect. Had a laugh such a clever write.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

the rage of the punctuation machine.
appreciate you, andrew...
j.
That was so good!!! I wish you could see the smile on my face. Oh, it's right there next to this. Part of my merriment is the fact that I have dentures and was the focus of some of your anger at one time. The concept and structure of this poem really catches the eye and reads easy. You must not be taking the right kind of chemicals. They'll hug you!

Posted 1 Week Ago


William Michael Reeves

1 Week Ago

I don't mean to be particular and picky, but I count two commas. Just another thing a mad man can be.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

yes, mad.
thank you, Bill,
j.
Fabulously and hilariously poignant and true to this mad hatter of a world we are all stuck living in ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words, Marvin,
j.
So many mads, J, there were it was hard to look out for that solitary comma, and alas, there it was at the very end of the poem. Mad enough not to pause, I see. there is no place in this epoch to be far from the madding crowd. If you can't beat them, the going says... Madly enjoyed this poem! Thanks for madly sharing. Mad Frederick.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, Mad Fredrerick...
appreciate you finding that comma,
j.
Frederick Kesner

2 Weeks Ago

It was a needle in a madstack!
Me too! And mostly I am mad because life has not lived up to my expectations in far too many ways. ~Sharon

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

I guess we must be grateful for the expectations that did get met.
thank you, Sharon,
.. read more
There's a book called, "The Art of not Giving a F**k." I haven't read it, but the title sounds promising.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

yessiree that does sound promising...
I wish I could...
thank you, Laz,
j.
Now come on sir Jacob. There is a fine line between madness and genius. You are of the later.
Now, some mad people are glad and live in bliss. others are seethingly sad, in armour's clad

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

you are too kind, no genius here, just someone lucky to have the words pass through.
thank yo.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Weeks Ago

Wow! You are welcome sir Jacob.
There are plenty of things to be mad about in this world, even if we don't understand them properly, or even understand why we are mad at them! A poem that is both funny and thought-provoking at the same time! They say that when you are truly satisfied with everything it is time to die! I'm not truly satisfied, so hopefully I'll live a little longer yet! Thanks for sharing this poem!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

me too, Robert, on the not quite satisfied...and thanks for your words,
j.
Strange thing about being mad... Being mad is not productive..or so they say... It it the level of madness that matters?
If we are not mad does that mean things do not change?
Lisa, early morning in Spain

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

good questions, Lisa...which I often ask myself.
thank you,
j.
Lisasview

2 Weeks Ago

You are very welcome Jacob…
Take one m out of comma and you have coma :)

Coma might be an alternative Utopia:)

I think it was Michael Bentine who said it's a mad, mad world". That was back in the fifties. Nothing's changed and it's only gonna get worse. When we don't get mad that means we don't care.

I'm mad too.

Chris

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Chris,
j.

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Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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