Untouched Gems

Untouched Gems

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Untouched Gems

 

 

 

views refused reviews

site smite with silence

posted poems plied

of trade, made, unmade

 

silence smite the site

with an implore not to ignore

posted poems plied

of trade, unmade, parlayed

 

the art of the twisted

mind to find itself

with reviews refused unused

compassion, rationed

 

in sanctioned imagination

striations of gyrations

of a mind twisting

itself into art departed

 

into silence smote

from what they wrote

only in a mind 

twisted to find itself.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/21/22

© 2022 jacob erin-cilberto


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Unfortunately that seems to be the case on this site. Many amazing poets, story writers, novelists post their work on writers Cafe but may either not get views, or views but not much reviews which is sad. I, as a person love to share my work with others and I enjoy receiving the feedback so I understand how it would feel to not get reviews when you had views. It's a kind of sinking feeling. You write truthfully here Jacob and hopefully new writers on the site get recognized.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

and older writers as well...thank you, Aura,
j..
Aura

1 Month Ago

The pleasure is all mine
We do land in a lonely place Jacob.
"into silence smote
from what they wrote
only in a mind
twisted to find itself"
The above lines. Honest words and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you, Coyote,
j.
I look at it philosophically. Sometimes they like 'em; sometimes they don't.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

true true.
This was such a fun read, Jacob! The way you play with words is amazing!!! I thoroughly enjoyed it. You are a master at this poetry stuff! :))

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you, Temperance, I appreciate your kind words,
j.
Temperance

1 Month Ago

You are very welcome!
Hello, Jacob! :)
This reads like a spell to summon up reviews.
I read lots of poems here, but leave few comments, and here I am, frantically typing this comment, compelled by the magic of your word choices and thought patterns. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Matt.....
I get my share of reviews and can't complain....but when I go down the b.. read more
Ha! I love this! Finally someone went there and so glad it was you with your creative and sensitive way.

I don’t know why reviews don’t equal views which is sad because that’s why we are here. Constructive criticism is helpful for any writer new or experienced. Not every poem is going to be liked by everyone but still should get respect for an art that we are all are a part of. Trolling is unacceptable. Maybe the piece is not understood but still one should say so and maybe others can help with interpretation. Maybe some are just musing and some just don’t want to and then there may be those that are not even members so they can’t and don’t want to be members. But for those who are…yes we should, out of respect. Just my opinion.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

yes, the poems need respect...they need it.
thank you, Patricia,
j.
Your rhyming had good timing; I cannot criticize, seeing such highs; oh, your imagination will appeal to the nation; nice one, J, as I might say!

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your words, Andrew,
j.
"the art of the twisted mind to find itself."
Is how I feel sometimes.
Well said, it is an astute observation of mankind and art.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you, light...
appreciate you,
j.
light and ashes

1 Month Ago

You are welcome.
If we post a poem and no one reviews it, is it a poem at all? I often wonder why there are so many views and so few reviews. I enjoyed the rhyming and the staccato lines in this one. Great choice of words! Lydi**

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

maybe, if the poem falls in the woods...
thank you, Lydi,
j.
Lydia Shutter

1 Month Ago

:) I knew you would pick up on my reference.
I touched this gem
with my twisted mind and open heart.
in the silence of compassion,
words of understanding;
"What matters not the views
only the friendly reviews,
revealing we are in this together
We are all the same.
We are, ongoing gems
un-uttered, yet
but already with care touched"


Posted 1 Month Ago


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jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

lightsong...you are a giver...and always leave reviews...and I know the view/review thing is a bit m.. read more
lightsong

1 Month Ago

That's really frustration, I hear You, and thank You for writing about/for them. I try to leave a re.. read more

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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