J., I have a question about this one: when you separate "flinch" to emphasize it in its own line, does that mean that "intended" is not to be read with that same force? Am I being clear?
I guess I'm wondering whey you chose not to write:
a slight touch
intended .
Other than that question, which is just my curiosity combined with a chance to ask a teacher, I really liked this effort also.
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1 Year Ago
I understand the question quite well..."flinch" is set off for emphasis and is intended to have more.. read moreI understand the question quite well..."flinch" is set off for emphasis and is intended to have more impact...I want the reader to stop on that particular word, rest upon it...then move on.
The other lines you mention...different intention when writing those. And yes, "intended" not with the same force....I appreciate your questions...you read poetry very carefully...and have a good eye.
j.
Reminds me of the song..."You must remember this." "A kiss is still a kiss"
Oldie but goodie...
What does a kiss say? Ahhhh, so many questions.
Lisa, 7am in Spain
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1 Year Ago
yes, yes...Dooley Wilson sang that...way back when...40's or 50's
Thank you, Lisa,
j.
1 Year Ago
Hi Jacob, I just knew you would know who sand that song... Seems so appropriate for your poem.. read moreHi Jacob, I just knew you would know who sand that song... Seems so appropriate for your poem..
Lisa
Does the other person feel what you are feeling? Is that kiss on the cheek merely a hello or does it promise more? Only time will tell. Frustration in this one. Lydi**
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..