forensic proof

forensic proof

 

 

 

put this in the plastic evidence bag,

 

(my heart)  

 

but be careful not to touch

 

tactile sensation

 

might cause a second fatality

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/11/22

Reviews

[Cherrie Palmer]

a possible double homicide (handle with extreme care). I like what you've done. The nicest part about learning form is later it lays a path for our thoughts and emotions to cross. Not as a hard rule but creatively with little markers laid along the way.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I guess this might be form, but not intentionally....I sure appreciate your kind review, Cherrie,read moreI guess this might be form, but not intentionally....I sure appreciate your kind review, Cherrie,
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I don't think the poem itself is a form but the understanding of form is silent backseat driver. Who rides along with me often :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh yes, perhaps a backseat driver...I like that....

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I read this as a man could be you or any other man that has been broken hearted too many times and won’t let his heart be touched again he wraps it in plastic cling
Liked this Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a very astute observation, Julie...
thank you,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Well I’m a bit like that too
Been burnt
Thanks Jacob

[duff]

Super mysterious. Oh ya. I like this new street.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I agree. Let's keep this damage on the emotive plane. That's bad enough.
W.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am surprised this poem was liked at all....thank you, Winston,
j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

I love this- I love this metaphor. I’m always one for dark pieces, and I’m always interested in many things related to crime and interrogations and such, this one really stuck to me. A heart wrenching, beautiful piece. I get this piece. It really says ‘I’ve been hurt before, and bad. I’m sure if anything hurts it, it’s gonna be fatal.’ Thank You for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Vertigo,
j.

[Brad Dehler]

Very nice. I like this free verse. I thought i should visit my friend J and stumbled upon this poem. Protect that heart of yours but also please keep sharing it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Brad,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Your heart has been damaged ( but still beating) by love once, but if it happens again, you will have a fatal hear attack, so be very gentle this time... because I can still feel the pain....
(this may be way out!)
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

spot on, Betty...spot on.
thank you,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome J... I'm learning how to read between the lines!!!
Best, B

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Jacob is becoming the Sherlock Holmes of love forensics; a new field of investigative journalism.
The victim, the victimizer, the evidence all point to the culprit: Love.
Whooooeeee

[jacob erin-cilberto]

at least we figured out the culprit.
thank you, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! You are welcome sir Jacob..

[red93]

Very interesting JE-C - a free-form Tanka ? Nicely put together and well-worded. Excellent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no, just free verse...thank you for your kind words,
j.

[Temperance]

and then, there is the chain of custody. Who has touched that heart before it ended up in the evidence bag? All those "touches" may have contributed to the cause if it being in the evidence bag in the first place. :)
I like this! Temp

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh my....I never thought of that...the chain of custody...I must try to find out...thank you, Temp.
j.

[Temperance]

You’re welcome