incline

incline

 

 

to the machines

grateful monotony

sobriety of bones

a drink of madness past

 

putting that all behind us now

repetitious logic

the will is there

but the feet are slow

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/10/23

Reviews

[duff]

"the will is there
but the feet are slow"

Describes my day in such a smart way. Neat writing my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, duff,
j.

[Vol]

There is a real poet at work here...
You should maybe think about expanding the scope of this one, it feels like there is something important struggling to work its way out of your imagery... I'd really like to know what it is... maybe context would help, as it is, it feels like two incomplete sentences...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your review, Vol,
j.

[Light and Ashes]

Great writing..love, love, love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Light,
j.

[Light and Ashes]

You are always welcome, jacob.

[willweb]

Slow and steady. tortoise and the hare, it may take longer to get there but it's easier to take in the scenery on the way. I know the feeling, it is something you get used to. Nice one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, very used to.
thank you, will,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

We are on the climb in many ways these days. But I'm not entirely certain that all of it is progress; whether it gets us further up the mountain of our ambitions or not. Perhaps the best logic before us is to slow down and tread carefully lest we lose our footing in reality and grasp of the important. It's always a pleasure to read your work Jacob. F.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I wish we would slow down, Fabian...sure wish we would.
we are getting or have gotten so far ahead of ourselves...tragic.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

What I regret most in this internet age is the lack of common courtesy and decency among people. Some seem to think that social media is a license for familiarity or rudeness. Many are intentionally so just to troll a prescribed response from the intended victim of their remarks. I don't tolerate such behavior in person and will not tolerate it online. I'll just block them and be about my merry and unconcerned way. I try my best to disassociate myself with such persons in life. Life's too short to waste the joy of it on bitter and impoverished hearts and minds. That's the gospel according to moi. ;) But for those that act decently and maintain some sense of decorum in their personal dealings with others I have and show respect and tolerance. I feel that it doesn't matter if we disagree. We can agree to disagree and still be friends. But I can't befriend rude people. It's simply not in my physical being to do so.

[Chris Shaw]

Where there is a will, there is a way. Everyone slows down eventually. Sobriety though, saves lives. Drink can kill. Dear J, your brevity here can be read on different levels. This is where I wandered first.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for wandering, Chris...I like your travels.
j.

[divya]

Dear Jacob,

Such a brilliantly worded poem! Reading it, I felt I am reading about someone I know, perhaps even myself. We have left behind the past and taken lessons in sobriety. We will all slow down yet never lose the will. The will is always the last to leave, perhaps never. The flesh gives way. Sadly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, divya,
j.

[divya]

Always welcome, my friend.

[Lorry]

Slow still gets us there Jacob, as well as giving us time to enjoy the view as well, if there is one worth enjoying.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true, if it is worth enjoying. Thanks for the visit, Lorry.
j.