the glass ever

the glass ever

now,

the draft 

is something invading

through a slightly open window

then,

the draft

was something from one country invading another

through a slightly open border

at the time,

the draft

was something that invaded families

through a demand of Uncle Sam

always,

no choice but to serve

no choice but to swerve

from a positioned life

never,

coming home

coming home broken

imprints invading through a slightly open window

sometimes,

remembering sanity

remembering the explosion of war

through a slightly open border

of sometimes being whole

sometimes being fragments of self

never understanding why

through a slightly open-ended argument

at the time

reasons

to serve

reasons to swerve from truth

shut the window

turn away the draft

remember what it's like to be whole

understand

the border, the frame, the pain

of a window

that never should have been

open.

erin-cilberto

6/1/23

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

No matter how many pawns are sacrificed, there will be always someone who will profit out of it and those people are never put in danger. The old adage “ Do as I say not as I do.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...Yes, our parents were good at saying that.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and worthwhile poetry Jacob.
"sometimes,
remembering sanity
remembering the explosion of war
through a slightly open border"
I body bags many in Bosnian, Africa and Iraq. They were silence. I did pray for them. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Soren]

Such a clever use of language and metaphor to make such a poignant point. I loved this piece. The United States was founded on the idea of immigration, ask the Indian, but at a minimum it needs to be controlled. But beyond this the poem itself was ingenious.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Soren,
j.

[Lorry]

I've always wondered why countries stop putting their citizens through this hell, wouldn't it be a better thing for everyone involved, to save the cost to the taxpayers they ask to fight for them, if the leaders just fought to the death instead? Maybe then they'd stop mouthing off so loudly and acting like the bully at school.
It would certainly cut down on all the lives ended, or maimed, plus, if I were American I would certainly be voting for trump next time, just to see if he can actually shut that stupid mouth of his. 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no he never would be able to shut it...not he....
j.

[Sami Khalil]

An awesome take on drafts, the rfalse reasons given to the populace, the invasion of other countries and privacy, the form of eruption and persuasion, legalized murder of the innocents and the profiteering of big corporations.
I buy all you had said marvelously.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding review, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir Jacob. Any time even in those times.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir Jacob. Any time even in those times.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob.. we have often tried to keep Communism from invading our Country… will we ever learn the best way to do so… too soon.. too late… now we have a situation that is involved in our Politics and the Politicians only want to protect their wealth and their families… not necessarily the millions of “we the people”. So much damage has been done to our Country. Silently… Pat 🔕

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, so much damage...thank you, Pat,
j.

[Andrew John]

Strange what an open window can bring. Thanks, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Andrew,
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Jacob, you've turned metaphors, emotions and the planet ruler's obsession with 'what games shall we play today' on their butts. That window deserves to be bolted, barred and boarded up. Perhaps obscurity is the answer to mayhem. Who says we should vote for those who excel in over-abundant power - ' the pain of a window - that never should have been - open. You never fail to influence my way of thinking.. of how deeply to think.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review em.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Simple ! Fact
govts I can name several yes ours inc that Luv war they excel at making it happen and send off thousands millions young to die

Loved the play on words metaphors etc
Good write Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Julie,
j.

[Laz K.]

We have here a clever play on words (I know I'm only pointing out the obvious, but it does deserve recognition :))
"remember what it's like to be whole" - maybe that's the problem. maybe this Pandora's box, this "window" won't be shut until we as individuals, each one of us, succeed in making ourselves whole. Then, conflict must inevitably disappear from the world.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your words, Laz.
j.