Love

Love

 

trust is a goddess

turning gold to rust

a jewel cracked by a stone

love

 

and we become

the diet for the deity

to swell her belly

love

 

the afterburner

in Hades

the fire burnt out

just an empty hull

 

a sinking boat

in a Titanic sky 

of what is now

mistrust

 

the goddess surveys

her work

laughs heartily

at the mayhem

 

and tells her man in the sky

"trust me forever

and I will never be with you"

love

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/8/25

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Dear j, once that trust is broken, can it ever be truly mended? I think perhaps not. There is much catastrophe in these lines as well as satire. There is danger in love, we all know that but the rewards can be heavenly.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Well, I think Venus is going to give something less than five stars to this one. Who is her man in the sky, anyway? Zeus? She better keep her distance from that sucker, or she'll end up swelling his belly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

She might just do that.
thanks, John,
j.

[Vol]

Jacob,
Every time ai read a poem about the dangerous track laid down by LOVE, I think of Keats' "La Belle Dame Sans Merci." You and I have both had our hearts ripped out and trampled. It's like we KNOW how dangerous love is, but, just like a rattlesnake for a pet, we want to give it a name and tell everyone, "It's okay, she won't bite."
Vol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, so true....thank you, Vol,
j.

[redzone]

J Giles said it in a song, "Love Stinks", while you Jacob, say it in a poem. What a word, 'mistrust', or 'trust', both based on deeds, not words. And both can be used, or not, by a cynical heart. As I read your poem, I was reminded of Captain Ahab's famous line, "from hell's heart I stab at thee; for hate's sake I spit my last breath at thee." gods and goddesses never play fair and we humans are always caught in the middle and leaving us to clean up this tangled mess. How many times can the pieces of a heart be put back together??

I know, my mind went beyond, the beyond once again. But I do love reading your poetry, Jacob. And for the search to find my mind as well.
-Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and the whale that is love impales us, rather than the other way around.
thanks, Curt,
j.

[Robert Trakofler]

that's my kind of girl... no really, that's my kind of girl:/ give me a tissue and some potato chips, perhaps a gin and tonic? great write here brother Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, brother bunny,
j.

[Gee]

Tis the way it is for many. If you find a good one hang on tight for they seem to be few and far between.

Happy New year father of the cafe, hope it is happy and healthy for you and yours.
Take care

Ta

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Ha ha, Father of the Cafe....
thanks, Gee, Happy New Year back at ya.
j.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this was a thought-provoking work with elements of myth, philosophy, and satire. it explores the theme of trust, and how fragile a thing it is, and how painful it is when it breaks.
stylistically, this was also brilliant. the single syllable ending line of the first two and last stanzas was both euphonic and draws attention to this magical word. throughout, the rhythm, which sometimes breaks unexpectedly, was captivating - i was hooked until the end.
it was a very intelligent piece that was superbly penned.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind review, Ern,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... since we have a natural Spirit in our soul and heart... we can encourage each other... who in turn encourage others to be Kind and cultivate a World where everyone has a Job and works for a livelihood... and not a Hand out. This is our Prayer day by day. Amen... Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, Pat, our prayer.
Bless you,
j.

[Stella Armour]

I think trust can only be broken once before it makes a fool of us and yet we don't see the tomfoolery because our hearts rule our heads.; that is the ones of us that do have kind and forgiving hearts.
Trust no false gods or goddesses, they are the pagan invaders of all that is pure.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate these insights...thank you, Stella.
j.

[MCS]

Really enjoyed this and I will leave it at that, I can't match what Amy shared.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Mary,
j.