Don't Ask

What does it take to be loveable enough?

Don't Ask

by Erin L George

 

Don't ask me to smile (I've never been one to fake it).

You take me to heights, to watch me fall.

I'll be your w***e, heart inside out -

begging for more.

 

But

don't ask me to love (or let it show through)

while you think of her, searching for proof

that you're loveable...

When

I'm here, telling you!

 

Don't ask me to give (I can't do this alone).

Make promises, meaning nothing at all.

I'll be your friend, dreams tossed on the floor -

ever the one to answer your call.

 

But

don't ask me to trust (I've been hurt before)

while you cry for her, in my arms

your lustable w***e...

When

I'm here, begging you!

I'll smile ear to ear

and land hard on my a*s

(that's what unconditional is)

never to sass.

 

But

I'll be crying inside (and wondering)

while you morn for her, frozen tears

oblvious of my fears...

When

is fair, fair?

I'll stand by you

bleeding back pain

(that's what best friends do)

never to gain.

 

But

I'll be dying inside (Do you care?)

while you take your time,

unaware of my love, blind...

When

will you open your eyes?

 

Reviews

[The Analog Kid]

My only criticism: I agree with Dane on the repitition.

Such powerful words. The narrator uses "w***e" to show how she "put out" in hopes of clinching the user. Sad. This speaks to most of us that have felt used. Often, what you need is right is front of your eyes. For some reason, humans are drawn into these stupid situations time and time again. Very enjoyable read.

Patrick

[Taylor H.]

powerful emotion! This is wonderful and fantastic in one :) great job!

[Mary]

I agree with coyote, it had such raw emotion, it made me feel sad for the person it the poem, great write:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. Straight to the point and honest. I like the set-up of the poem. So many statements stood out in the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote