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A Distance Too Fond

A Distance Too Fond

A Poem by Erin Thomas

Here I am, in menuet,

Where all I really want is regret.

I beg you in sarabande,

From a distance I am too fond

 

Of taking things in allegro.

Now waiting for you to respond

To my scherzino

All melody, bar the casino

 

I can’t gamble

No preamble.

A kiss, hold the fermata

Don’t let go.

 

Hanging on my only crescendo.

Time you waste for innuendo.

My heart beats a flutter of vibrato

Even with a beat reply staccato.

 

I live in a perfect melody

Where I all I want is your complexity.

The dark knight, a princess can’t resist

Magnetic discords, the world and pure intensity. 

© 2012 Erin Thomas


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Erin Thomas
on my mind

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I like your use of musical vocabulary! Very neat and creative

Posted 7 Years Ago


I haven't read anything where I've not known at least 5 words listed on the page before, so that's a first! I see intelligence and I understand the music terms so I'm guessing it's a romantic feel and it sounds like a male waiting for a female to come so he can make the orchestra play their song as she arrives. I would love to know what it really is about, and it seems more imaginative rather than literal which is an uber bonus compared to most poems around! I like the rhythm, the layout and the 4 lines structure - kind of like 4 bars in a song too! A little rhyme never hurts and neither does a big finish!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Erin Thomas

7 Years Ago

To be honest, it's about a "bad boy" who I wanted to be with, but I couldn't really get out of my ow.. read more
Persona

7 Years Ago

Ah dark knight and innuendo! I see! I like that - reference the bat man film in a way but also that .. read more
Erin Thomas

7 Years Ago

Exactly! :)
This is really beautiful. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is beautiful, good luck :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wonderful imagery and I enjoyed the the music imagery it was unique in that context. Good work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Haha very nice. I love how you made great use of musical terminology in this poem and made it come out so beautifully. I can't say that there is any part of this I don't like :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


I agree completely with Rhea. This is original. I'm not sure anyone who's not obsessed with music will understand, though. It's wonderful.

That is absolutely all I can say. 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


oh my gosh. this poem is absolutely lovely and unique. i love the use of musical terms i have never seen anyone do that before. this is a beautiful twist on a classic romance. i seriously can't express how much i LOVE this poem. GOD!!! you keep writing or i will track you down and hold you at gunpoint until you do. uggg i wish i could write like you.

Posted 7 Years Ago



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I'm a student. Contact me if you want to know more. I write for myself (and for my classes when needed). However, I am always looking for ways to improve! more..

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