The Tree of Forbidden College

The Tree of Forbidden College

A Poem by Erin Thomas
"

Do not eat from the Tree of Forbidden College

"

Candy canes and lolly pops fill that forest full of trees.

The same sweet temptation is the reason Jenny flees.

Chocolate morsels dot the bark with sprinkles on the ground.

Imagine what you wish. It knows your Sirens’ sound.

 

You will forget about that dessert with decadence.

This seductive forest does it all and leaves no evidence.

Jenny runs through the trees, quicker than a whip.

Candy ropes obstruct the way. Just hope she doesn’t trip.

 

She came for the same reason as everyone,

But her journey through the forest has only just begun.

Swinging through the gnarled marshmallow stalks,

She screams, for she’s just unleashed pandora’s box.

 

“Go, Jenny!” The hard candy yells from the forest floor,

“Quick, or else you’ll be like us, stuck as another spore!”

She runs and jumps away from them, left to acknowledge

that she had learned not to eat from the Tree of Forbidden College. 

© 2013 Erin Thomas


Author's Note

Erin Thomas
I didn't know where I was going with this in the beginning, but it all seemed to work out in the end. Let me know how I did.

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This is a really cool poem :) I like the rhyming technique although I think if you're going for the AABB etc structure there are a few tweaks you might want to make, and some of the sentences don't flow as well together as the others (for example: "swinging... marshmallow stalks, she screams, for she's..." I don't think the 'for' is necessary, the rhythm of the poem would be better without it.
Nice description and imagery, and for some reason it reminded me of Hansel and Gretel with the Witch's cottage made out of candy! Great poem :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like it

Posted 9 Years Ago



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