Darling Fair

Darling fair, with bright and golden hair,

If you were mortal, I would never know.

A perfect, fallen angel you must be.

 

So, you heav’nly cherub; please stay true.

For though you often tell me you are mine,

I tend to forget it a lot of the time.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

If here reviews could be a single word,
My single word for this would then be: WOW!

Well done!!
(For sound purposes, I'd suggest to move "often" to before "tell me" rather than leave it after.....and I was going to say something about the last line being a bit wonky in regards to the musicality, but the way the musicality flows, I can say it kind of works.... veering from the set rhythm to end in style and the bang that is the line!)

[Ethan]

Ah yes, you're right, good idea. And yeah, I was trying to go for something with a couple amphibrachs on the last line. Does it end the line abruptly?

[emipoemi]

not at all. It's reads perfectly. You just need to remember to breathe in between "it" and "a" to really pack the punch of that charm.

[Ethan]

Oh okay, thank you very much :)

[emipoemi]

always with pleasure.

[Manel]

I love this poam so sweet and adorable every girl loves to hear these words

[siobhan]

As other commenters have suggested I wish I could say GREAT. This just sums things up, short, snappy...interesting.

[Ethan]

Thank you :)

[Kage]

Such a sweet poem. I would love to hear that being said to me :)

[fadingtale]

I love the ending, and love how this written! Thank you for submitting for all about love contest!

[Tabby Mac]

I LOVE THIS ONE! Sweet, creative!!
I'm loving your style! Well penned!
Tabby

[Ethan]

Ah, thank you very much Tabby :)

[Zephyr]

I adore your poems a lot!
Your works stand out in quality and language.
This too is great!
Thanks for sharing:)

[Ethan]

Thanks Neetha

[Alexzandera]

I enjoy the balance of some rhyme but not too much rhyme. I hope that makes sense.

[Ethan]

It does and is appreciated. Thank you

[Maria]

Speechless, that is how I was left. Beautiful piece

[Ethan]

Thank you very much

[A.K. Rohner]

Aw, that's a really sweet poem. I really can't think of anything else to say but that.

[Ethan]

Thanks!! :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

This sounds like something I would read in a novel somewhere. I really like it.

~Luna

[Ethan]

Thank you very much