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Darling Fair

Darling Fair

A Poem by Ethan

Darling fair, with bright and golden hair,

If you were mortal, I would never know.

A perfect, fallen angel you must be.

 

So, you heav’nly cherub; please stay true.

For though you often tell me you are mine,

I tend to forget it a lot of the time.

© 2017 Ethan


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If here reviews could be a single word,
My single word for this would then be: WOW!

Well done!!
(For sound purposes, I'd suggest to move "often" to before "tell me" rather than leave it after.....and I was going to say something about the last line being a bit wonky in regards to the musicality, but the way the musicality flows, I can say it kind of works.... veering from the set rhythm to end in style and the bang that is the line!)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

6 Years Ago

not at all. It's reads perfectly. You just need to remember to breathe in between "it" and "a" to re.. read more
Ethan

6 Years Ago

Oh okay, thank you very much :)
emipoemi

6 Years Ago

always with pleasure.



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You have got a unique way to portray your poems and i do like it...this one is too good.
keep on writing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

6 Years Ago

Thanks :)))
This reminds me of young infatuation. Often becoming obsession, mixed with insecurity. It's perfectly depicted here as sweet and innocent, driven with good intentions of wanting to be loved.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ethan

6 Years Ago

That's exactly what I was going for. Thanks very much for the review❤️
I can relate to this in a way in real life.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

6 Years Ago

I'm happy then :)
Hah, I guess many people should be able to relate to the last two lines. There was originality as well as reality in this piece. As always, beautifully penned.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ethan

6 Years Ago

Thanks :))
Zoya

6 Years Ago

You're welcome
Very sweet rhymes indeed! I enjoyed the beautiful imagery you used! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much
"A perfect, fallen angel you must be."

If she were perfect, she would not have fallen. I like the contradiction. Your eyes see the falling of a beautiful lover and your heart sees the divine and the infinite.

Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

~Rain.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

6 Years Ago

Haha that's true, that wasn't really on purpose. I suppose I meant fallen as in literally falling fr.. read more
Short and sweet. I loved the simple but powerful line: "If you were mortal, I would never know." Takes talent to say a lot with a little. I look forward to reading more of your work, thanks for sharing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ethan

6 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Woh! This is amazing! The way you described was impressive! The concept was great! Well written!!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
Shasha

6 Years Ago

Not a problem!
This is such great poem, your words selection in each sentence was great. you have wrote this perfectly, well done :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

6 Years Ago

Thanks Joey :P
Joey Nizz

6 Years Ago

Your welcome :p
All of your poems rhyme so well! I liked it just like your other pieces. It's amazing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

6 Years Ago

Thank you Anjali :)
Anjali

6 Years Ago

No problem!

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